Where did he go? Did he find her?

Haunting insight into Zack in his new life. Amazing job showing how everything, his strength, his health, his family and even his environment reminded him that he wasn't himself. Your description of paranoia as fear and responsibility fits Zack perfectly. As does the comfort he finds in the act of running. Amazing insights.

Wow! Zack/Adam's reaction to his returning memory fragments seem very realistic, very much in character. The song fits perfectly. Please continue with this.

wow! its a great story and really well written - I hope so much he finds Max. Im putting this story on my favourite right now!

Hey! I'm so happy to find this gem today. I miss reading your stuff, you know that? I miss it A LOT. Your style is just so distinct in my mind, it's so *complete* and *detailed* and it just *flows*. Great word choices littered all around, I especially liked this part, "sending a cold rush through his bones and blood". It's not just imagery, it gives a sense of...symbolism. Will you write more, please? If not, then I'm just going to have to hunt down a copy of Final Fantasy, get a feel for the plot, and THEN read everything of yours. By the way, did getting your wisdom teeth out hurt?

Oh, this is awesome! :D Very, very good; very well-written. Excellent imagery. Almost poetic. Great job. Very emotional and very plausible. You create a very realistic picture of Zack's new life. This was probably meant as a stand-alone (and could work that way) but it would be nice to see continued, as well. Either with him finding Max, or, actually, what would be more interesting is seeing his life progress a little further before he does; seeing him out in the world alone. Or meeting up with some of the other X5s. Just a suggestion :) Anyhow, thanks for sharing this. It was excellent!

I love your writing style. It's very descriptive and lets the reader right into the story. I found it very...enrapturing. is that even a word? I don't know but it seems to fit so I'm keeping it there.

I said it once a long time ago and I'll say it again. You are one of the best fic writers out there. Where have you been? Let me guess, probably with the rest of us disgruntled DA watchers who don't have much reason to come around here anymore. Things certainly have changed, and I so miss the great written fics that were once coming so fast and furious. I miss Zack, never thought I'd say that, but after this season I realize just how much. I miss Lydecker and the wonderful M/L chemistry, Eyes Only.....everything that made last season so great. Please come back again. I love your writing. You're so talented....and to be so young! You have a beautiful gift. I really, really miss the good ol' days!

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Nice choice of a song to compliment this fic. Really good job showing how torn Zack is. Beautiful imagery, especially in the second to last paragraph, and the bit about the land being something he could hide in. :)

That was awesome! You paint the scene so well, with such clear detail, it was fascinating. I loved this. I really did.