What? Thats the END? Its kinda really sad but maybe a little bit funny at the same time O.o nice job on your stoy though. I enjoyed reading it. Too bad you had to crush ash's heart though...

Yay for pikachu! Nice work as always! I like how your story is different and original yet still frequently connects back to the actual story :D

Again,nice work. But hopefully misty isnt going to be so rude in the chapters to come.

Haha I seriously enjoyed this chapter. It was quite funny. Oh and I LOVE how you used the same bike dialogue! It was great! Also id like to say you use a great job writing! It was very easy to visualize what was going on.

That was absolutely excellent! And btw this is the first ever war story ive found on this site. So i thought you were pretty original. Anyways im looking forward to reading the rest of your story. I think its wonderful so far! Nice work :D

Great story! I liked the realism in the war. I also loved the Ash-Gary rivalry...it was really well written. hope to see more of those updates!

Signing Off

Ash the Aura Guardian

intresting good chapter

This is really good and I love how Gary got the crap beat out of him

Good chapter dude thought it was intresting

Phooy, long waits are always annoying. But this is good, and I really like it so far.

i liked that line 2. XD

dialogue can be a lot of things. like...emotions, if u will.

where this story is headed, huh? ...i hav no idea. it can be that they go bac 2 pallet and c ash's mom or still running away from the hoenn soldiers. ther r a lot of possibilities 2 where something can go.

ok that was interesting u had ash sleep with someone in the second chapter really?this seems a little weird please let them have used condom

he wasn't supposed 2 run ovr any1 in the 1st place. XD

yea, i get that. :)

i THINK i can b 1 of ur beta-readers. ca beta-reader 4 more than 1 person?

Loved it. I cannot wait to see what happens next. It's gonna be great i can tell. I noticed that it was the same. I was like wait isn't this the same as the episode they meet. The only differencere is that this is more of an teen/adult version of pokemon. lolz. They wake up in bed after forgetting they had sex. I was lmao! lolz. Update sooner than later.

Aahhhhhh! 3 ash & misty!

I loved the way you used the bike-stealing dialogue... You should do that in the future, like, when team rocket caught them on the blimp and were all like 'we seem to have caught two lovebirds'