I loved it! :D

I hope you plan to continue this, cuz it's awesome so far!

One of the best young-Weiss-centric fics I've read. I think you captured his personality very well and his thoughts about Alf were very...umm...can't think of the word...I'll just say they hit the mark. Keep up the good work!

Sklee! Grear story! U really dont c any good arf ficsnowadays but this was si cool. So dramatic! I especially liked it because weiss is my second fav character in arf ( right behind niko) i lovex this :D

Interesting. I've always been curious about his thoughts on poor Alf. Weiss.. I'm still not decided on him. Rather I love him, or hate him.

And don't worry about the ending. I like it. It's good. You have quite the talent.

I like it! I also believe this is a great start. I really like your depiction of Lord Mahat, since, in my opinion, he could be difficult to portray accurately because he had never had a scene in the game. (But I guess that could also make him easy to portray, for some.) I love Weiss.

Wow! I loved it! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Really, really great start! And I certainly don't think there was anything wrong with the ending. I know the feeling, when you have such a vivid idea for the start of something, but by the time you get to the ending (and sometimes even the middle for me!) you're really not sure how to conclude it nicely. But don't worry, because it really didn't seem rushed or anything like that.

The characterization and technical writing were pretty super too, I really liked the insight into Weiss' thoughts, and they seemed perfectly suited to the circumstance. You also have a very crisp and interesting way of wording things, but it was never confusing or overly-frivolous.

I'm really hoping you're post more of the story soon, because I would love to read more! You did a really good job, thanks.