|Reviews for Shadow Of A Doubt|
| Harp Strumming Choirboy 1/31/11 . chapter 1
Oh my god.
That was amazing. D:
I was kind of waiting for Ed to accidentally call Mustang dad- but I don't think he would've done that anyway, and he made a reference to the fatherlyness- thats good enough for me. :D
| PwnedByPineapple 1/23/11 . chapter 1
I was supposed to be doing homework instead of reading this story. BUT I JUST COULDN'T STOP. It was so awesome and suspenseful and all that. Plus, you're one of the few authors who writes parental!Roy/Ed really well. And I don't think they were OOC at all. Everyone has vulnerability, and you portray it very well in Roy and Ed. Gah, this was just too awesome. I had 'Hero' by Skillet playing when I started reading, so I left it on replay. It was a very epic combination.
Thank you so much for writing. )
| reminiscent-afterthought 1/16/11 . chapter 1
I love this. It's so well written, and given what I've seen of Fullmetal Alchemist, rather in-character as well.
| AllNightOperator 1/13/11 . chapter 1
I absolutely adore the image of Mustang sitting alone in the cave and saying "I know, kid" to Ed. You've captured Ed and Roy wonderfully. Thank you for sharing this.
| Adhara.Elric 12/9/10 . chapter 1
Hello, dear writer:
This is the most wonderful story about Fullmetal & a mine inspection I ever read. I really like the speed and the way you develop the fanfiction. The smidgeon OOCness of them... well, what was all people thinking about? They were trapped underground and in risk to die! I think you did it perfect :D
Your story is on my favourites right now, thank you for write this wonderful story. I luv Edo & Roy, parental or not :)
| IOTR 11/29/10 . chapter 1
This may just be the best Parental!Roy and Ed fic I've ever read. I love the characterization and how you switched from Ed's dream to the present. It definitely added to the storytelling. Lovely work!
| SongoftheDarquePhoenix 11/29/10 . chapter 1
That. Was. Amazing. The perfect combination of drama, angst and humor. At the end... I was like, 'wow'. I think you are right in that aspect. Mustang /did/ kill children. Mustang /is/ (in that aspect) a monster. I honestly wouldn't be suprised if, in Ed and Al, he saw redemption. That, I beleive, is what made this peice so increadible.
| DuHSPaZZiNGFeL 11/8/10 . chapter 1
Brilliant. A true work of creativity and originality in a world that was already created by another. Hence fanfiction, right?
I love your Patental!RoyEd stories. They're full up with a lot of heart and always make me either smile or freak out with anxiety. I always look forward to them. I also find it great that you decided to do it from Ed's point of view this time. Honestly, the plot really fit well with his personality, and I have to admit that some of those bits of knowledge on different minerals was a very interesting read.
Keep it up and write a lot more! Your FMA writings are just too amazing to pass up!
| lotus-bugxm9 11/3/10 . chapter 1
Long And epic. Bravo:)
ur the queen of all parentalEdxRoy stories! Yayy
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| Kitsura E 10/29/10 . chapter 1
You are a marvelous writer xD I love your stories, and this one is just like all the others. Awesome, except more awesome because I love Parental RoyEd, haha sorry. The details were portrayed very excellently and I don't think they were out of character at all. You made them in character, and the supposedly OOC parts I think that they would act that way if the circumstances were like that. Keep up the great stories.
| MARYLOVER 10/27/10 . chapter 1
Wow, and I was just rolling down ffnet updates...
This is one of the best parental!RoyEds I've ever read. I really enjoyed this piece. Nicely done and well written. Take care and keep on the good work. Bye
| Doomschneider 10/27/10 . chapter 1
Oh, god, i SOOO needed this. The storyline was brilliant, in my book, and well thought out. A fine example of whumping in it's most refined and plot relevant form. I loved it. Had to read it in one sitting... till 3 or 4 in the morning because i had to REread about a third of it... 4 times. And I appreciate the emphasis on the paternal/superior-subordinate relationship, in contrast to... some OTHER kinds. You also really captured the characters and nuances of the series- very faithful to the original works. Even if the characters had to be OOC, they were gonna be out of character in character. I REALLY appreciate some CANNON every now and then.
Aside from the story, I don't think i can express how much I appreciate the quality of writing and editing. It's sickening how many people think they can just beat their heads on a key board and post it. Simultaneously mutilating the story, the characters, the English language, and sometimes a few other languages- impressive, but disgusting. Not only are your structure and style stunning and refined, but the post (more like "publication") is pristine and almost error free. Gold in ANY line of writing.
You could afford to lay off the mid-sentence italics. I probably noticed more because i was picking through to mark all the italics with punctuation so I could see it regardless of formatting- some formatting don't transfer well and i HAD to save this on my computer. I noticed there were a lot, but it didn't bother me to do so. Problem was, when I read it, I noticed a lot of the emphasis wasn't really necessary and sometimes even threw off natural emphasis for me. I'm not saying not to use it at all; it's a useful technique, especially in dialogue, but it's one of those things you should use only when ABSOLUTELY necessary so it doesn't lose it's effect.
I may have also noticed a few missing periods, but that could have been the device i was reading it on. They were usually at the end of paragraphs and dialogue, and I could count them on one hand.
That's the only real critique I have. It was beautiful, brilliant. I'll be re-reading this with great joy for years. Really. and i won't even have to put up with horrid editing to do so. My thanks for this wonderful piece to brighten my day. I'll probably be stalking your stories, now.
Your gushing fan,
| Emememe 10/26/10 . chapter 1
This was awesome! I absolutly LOVE Ed and mustang in your stories, and thier sweet moments are always so well written, without becoming wierd or unbelievable like some Ed/mustand parental I've read. Great job, your stories are always so much fun to read _
| Thousand Sunny Lyon 10/26/10 . chapter 1
That was awesome. And that was looong, lol. Wow, longest single chapter I've ever read, and the only problem with that is if I stopped for the night, I could never find my place again in the morning. Hence one reason why I am up at 5 in the morning writing this. . Testament to how it's too good to stop.
I'm glad everyone got out all right in the end, I like my angst and anxieties resolved :) Yes, I love happy endings.
Nice mix of dream and reality, leaving us to wonder if the dream wasn't really a flashback (er, flashforward?).
Keep up the good work!