This was really good. Thanks so much for sharing!

DM

I'd have to say this story moved too quickly. Also, the author made too much use of exposition. This is especially true when describing various character relations, such as the "Saminator vs. Criminales" scene. In a longer story, greater (but subtler) use of exposition would be appropriate. Here, it feels forced into the story like a square peg into a round hole.

The non-dialog sentence structure could use refinement, too, as it does not flow together well.

On the other hand, the story idea was good, and the character dialog was generally in line with the show.

Overall: 2.5 of 4 stars

I rate it C-.

The ending almost seemed a little smooth, but it had some good lines and everbody was kept in character. The whole cast's reaction to your villain was believable, so I liked it, and I will be looking for your other fics. This was good. Be sure to write some more chapters.