I think I might finish it. I have a great idea. Thanks for getting the ball rolling and I will definitely give you credit if I continue it.

dude,, thats not how the book went...

You have talent, i'll hand you that. But, in the start of the storie, u made Amon Tell Han to soon, because even Amon can keep a secret that big. Could've taken it back before the kidnapping to change the story, but overall I liked and onto chapter 2.

I love your story! it's both a brilliant story and its based on a brilliant series! please update soon as I will be avidly watching you!

I actually really like this. Update soon?

This isn't half bad. I really like it. Hope you continue the story a bit...and thanks for using correct spelling and grammar! It's great.

Again, really good job!

Some constructive criticism: to me, it feels like the story is moving a little fast at some parts. Maybe add 3rd person limited view for certain areas so that you can really get the feelings of a character without first person, like the book. :) but don't worry, you're doing a fine job. Keep it up!

poseidon262

Interesting start! I'd love to read on!