|Reviews for Hostage|
| CrimeStopper136 2/7/13 . chapter 3
I really liked this chapter, probably the best one yet :D
| CrimeStopper136 2/7/13 . chapter 2
It's really good, I just have to ask, what is "lifeblood"? And also, Frank wouldn't intervene on a negotiation, and he definitely wouldn't shout at other officers or a suspect, even if he did have his son hostage.i'm sorry if I sound like I'm being picky and believe me, I don't like it when people say bad things about my stories but I just wanted to help. I think it's really good so far though :)
| CrimeStopper136 2/7/13 . chapter 1
Well, it had some patchy grammar and I don't really understand the thought bits. It seems to go from 1st to 2nd person. However, I thought it was a really good start and the storyline is a really good idea. I like it :)
| Aeidhryn 8/10/11 . chapter 4
Your strong points: Definitely making me feel for the hostages. You have a good feel for characterization of otherwise unimportant people. Good job.
Your less strong points: The constant litany of "I love you, Linda" did not affect me at all. Call me heartless, but it was not convincing.
Continue writing! You have a pretty average amount of proper SPaG (Spelling Punctuation and Grammar) but you still may want to get a Beta so he/she can help you out with a few things. For example, you should use commas in between direct adresses.
| Runner043 2/20/11 . chapter 1
Hi, IAP. I'm reading my way through all the BB stories and am now at this one. Just read your intro, althought it's probably irrelevant now, but I think Danny's precinct might be the 08. I noticed an '08' pin on the collars of Jamie's and his partner, I assumed it's their precinct number. Would Danny & Jamie work out of the same precinct?
Like the banter between Danny & Demarcus, the part with the adult shop was funny. Demarcus just needs to remember he's not there to shop.
I had a feeling that kid was gonna be obnoxious.
| KeepFaith-SmellApples 11/28/10 . chapter 4
oh! That was really good! Love it!
| StellaBonaseraTaylor 11/26/10 . chapter 4
Hi my friend,
I promised you three reviews today and I'm a woman that honor my commitments. lol
Gosh, one year I accompany you, I mean more than that, but one year you know me and I try to show you the magic, perfection, the wonder that I see in your stories, I have overcome my shyness and my fear make too many mistakes just because I needed to make public my admiration for you, I felt the need to tell you that you're a brilliant writer, who can touch the hearts of those who are reading, you make me live the story, I'm sad when the characters are sad, I vibrate when they're happy, and I cry, smile and learn, I can always learn something from your stories, there is always a lesson, there is always something that helps me to want and to try and be somebody better, in the end of your stories I'm never the same person who began to read. So here I'm again humbly to say thank you for share your talent with us, thank you for giving us so many good times, thanks for always improving my day with an incredible story and with sweet and true words. Thank you for allowing me to make long review, just to try to show my admiration and appreciation for you. Thank you for tolerating me as a reader, fan and cyber friend. :)
Okay I'm crying right now, I don't know why, but you always get the feelings to flow and it's just easy to speak frankly with you, so thanks again.
Well before I need a boat to be able to walk in my own home I'll talk about story right?
I'm not sure but this was the first multi-chapter story that is not smarcked that I read, so it has a big importance, and I hope you see what you're special for me ;)
Okay this end had many surprises, good surprises of course, as can you think this things? These are incredible.
Kamani was still alive, wow that was something I never thought, as also the negotiator's family being there, so very good.
part of King I also liked a lot, a proof of friendship, risking his own life to save a friend.
God I try to imagine the pain and fear that Frank was feeling, as I imagine losing a son/daughter is the worst pain there is, it's against nature, the natural cycle of life. And he only lived it before, surely he couldn't raise a second time.
I have not mentioned in the previous review, but I loved erin lol. she's the person more rational and consistent at the right time lol.
And Linda, for me she is a hero for being married to a cop lol. God, my heart would stop on the first day of his work. But she is strong and the support he needs the invisible force that makes he back home alive every day.
And I loved that you brought a fun and relaxed Danny, I love them both in the hospital room. At that moment I was laughing lol.
I was realizing you had not mentioned Kelly yet and I was starting to wonder why, but I knew she wouldn't be out of that story lol.
love how you write their family relationship, I think that is so beautiful and intense, they may argue and disagree with each other, but will always be there for the family.
And as always many lessons to be learned, help others even if it's a strange, those are real heroes and sometimes we are near them and don't even know who they are, but it's actually a great comfort to know they exist. :)
Okay I'll stop here because I'm wanting to cry again. lol
I loved it, was really a delight to read this story, thank you
Many warm hugs
SBT (your humble follower)
| StellaBonaseraTaylor 11/26/10 . chapter 3
Hi my friend,
Look who's here again?
Gosh, this is a real turnaround in my day, from a story full of fun for a totally angst lol.
God I couldn't take my eyes off the computer until read the whole chapter and I must confess I was a superhuman effort to stop and write this review instead of reading the next chapter, but just b/c it is you I'll review first. ;)
This is angst? Really? Gosh this is more than angst, this is pure tension, you know when you're watching a movie and not taking your eyes off the screen not to miss nothing of the movie, as if at any moment something would happen and you just have to see this, that's how I felt reading this story, or when we're reading a book and just cannot stop until the end. This is surprisingly fantastic.
Poor Frank, at this moment it's not the commissioner who is there but a father desperate not to lose another son. And more professional than he is at this moment is the father in him that speaks louder he just needs to know that his son is alive.
Certainly this is a tragedy that this family doesn't want to live again, and everyone is scared but also are trying to be strong for each other.
And poor Linda being the cop's wife and just praying that he'd always come home every day, and couldn't do anything else and at that moment when she sees the real possibility of losing him, wow y friend lots of tension and angst and you're doing it beautifully. You know how to hold my attention completely. lol
You're exploring feelings of all characters and this is just fantastic. Congrats as you always do just the best, this is amazing
Many warm hugs
SBT (your friend always amazed with your talent)
| nomorewriting 11/22/10 . chapter 4
Great ending to this great story! I really liked the tension and the drama to this chapter, relieved by the sweet ending at the end. I liked that Linda was tough enough for this moment -nice that she's on his mind through this experience. I really liked this story! You should write another angsty, gritty crime story!
| PeggsterLover 11/18/10 . chapter 1
this was sooooooooo good! I loved it! I think they should use this for one of their episodes :) as long as he doesn't die I'd love to see Danny in a bit of trouble instead of always being the hero :P you did exactly that! Really well written and you kept me on the edge of my seat!
| ladybrin 11/18/10 . chapter 4
wonderful- very sigh worthy- as well as a great nail biter- i LOVED all four chapters- but i am so glad you gave it the sappy ending- that was just great- and danny/linda love awwwww- anyway- i really really HOPE you wil wrtie another multi- chapter fic- i loved it- you Go- girl!
| montez 11/17/10 . chapter 4
about time Danny got some help. wow what a twist with the negotiator, his kid was Cory, didn't see that coming.
bad guys dead, Danny's on the mend with Linda by his side (i love them two) and all is good with the world. nice story ((except your mention of Kelly, don't like her, but I'll overlook that since it was a good hurt/angst/comfort Danny story)
can't wait to see what you do to the Reagan's next time.
| Justicerocks 11/17/10 . chapter 4
Aw this was so cute! I loved it. The twsit with Jenkins and his family was a nice touch, it was a suprise although I had some suspessions of Cory's actions and bravery. I love Jamie's "Yeah tha'll happen line." It cracked me up and Erin holding Linda back was nice.
You really know how to capture the characters. I'm very glad you ended it happyily :D. You should diffently write anothet fic.
I episode on Friday looks so amazing! :D :D
| blackrose538 11/17/10 . chapter 4
Yay! It worked!
Okay, actually I wanted to write this tomorrow but I just had to try again.
I really loved this story! I think you did a very good job with this one and I really loved the ending!
Honestly, I could imagine reading more of those. Maybe I'll write a multi-chap story, too, but I'm not sure yet. Have to wait and see ;-)
But I really would like to see another one from you! Very well done!
| sallyferrell 11/17/10 . chapter 4
No way was it too sappy! Great ending to a great story. Terrific job on Danny and Linda's relationship. Hope to see more from you soon.