|Reviews for Hindsight|
| Animom 10/29/10 . chapter 1
At first I suspected that this was a sequel to 'Talking it Out" – or was, at least, set in the same bar – but even if it isn't it has the same easy charm (that is rather reminiscent of Terry Pratchett, come to think of it) as your previous entry.
Made me laugh out loud several times – your characterizations of Akhnaden and Seto particularly – and though there wasn't much "Seal" in it, it was still a fun read that left me grinning.
| Always a Bookworm 10/29/10 . chapter 1
Aw! XD Nice ending, I really liked this! Not too long, and you wrote it very well. I laughed at the last line!
| harinezumiko 10/28/10 . chapter 1
"I offered to make a fireball in an enclosed space with no windows."
"If, at the end of the interview, neither yourself nor the interviewer are on fire then it's a positive net result."
I love it when you write humour!
| My Misguided Fairytale 10/27/10 . chapter 1
Ok, so you've set your last two stories in a bar...interesting trend xD I do agree that your alcohol mentions might have been a bit much, but this is totally funny and I sympathize so much with poor Mahaado, having to sit through that interview xD You'd think he'd have a little more professionalism than that, but I like the different spin you gave on his character.
You've got a few wrong words here and there: "...mistaking the slumped shape at the corner for the bar for a pile of coats" - should be "of the bar," right? Another: "...let out a loud groan as despair and slide out" - "groan of despair."
The ending is funny, too. I can only imagine what his first day (and subsequent career) would be like xD I wish the Sealshipping was a little stronger, it seems more like just friendship to me as opposed to a 'pairing,' but I like the way they interact in the story, and I can definitely see the potential for more in their relationship.
Definitely another solid, amusing, well-written piece from you! Keep up the good work, and best of luck this round! )
Jess (My Misguided Fairytale)
| yllimilly 10/27/10 . chapter 1
I don't know how you came up with the idea of a Magic Council, or Akunadin and Son teaming up in the corporate world, but it's brilliant and hilarious! I liked the surprise ending as well, I like it when I don't know what to expect from a story.
I feel like there were a notch too many alcohol metaphors at the beginning of the story, but the first sentence certainly is a keep. I loved it!
Good luck for the contest!