Nice work. Like a stream-of-consciousness, or whatever it's called, and truly haunting in a rather bewitching way. I really like this, looking forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing!

This is awesome. _ I have a deep fondness for stories like this - almost stream-of-thought, just getting everything as exactly as the character thinks it, instead of it being nicely edited. It also is obviously mimicking the Bleeding Effect in this case, which I happen to love as well. Good job. :D

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Wow, this story is very intresting , intense and definatly VERY confusing.

Desmonds life is tricky business