Well, very interesting, and with what seems to be the mayor taken out before everything could go down, and the Initiative seeming to be looking for more info on the Brits, will be something to see when the groups either clash, or work together. Oh yes, great to see more of Termy Xander here, even if it was sort of a cameo moment.

Finn's attitude in this chapter really bothered me. I've heard American service members (both active and retired) talk about the SAS before, and they were all very respectful of the SAS's capabilities and skills. And they'd certainly never call British troops *mercenaries*.

So Finn's speech really felt off to me. I *hope* this is a deliberate plot point and you don't think this is the normal attitude of American troops...

Now, I got this review mixed with another on, so here goes, I wanted to say that I really enjoyed the Travers/Faith chat there, and will be curious to see what all might happen next time, as it looks like Travers is a true believer, and that it seems like he thinks it's a valid test, and makes me wonder if Giles just wussed too much to make Buffy understand, and will look forward to more of Xander popping in and shooting things up.

A very good section here, and really enjoyed seeing Harmony as a person, instead of the way she was basically treated in the series as an idiot, even after being a vampire, though don't like how they've made her a reality star in the comic series, and will look forward to seeing if she and Jono can continue to build on this current friendship.

OK, this chapter isn't bad...but it's distracting. You need to consider: what's the point of this story? Who are the main characters? How do I say what I'm trying to say without getting too wordy?

You've written the SAS bits well, no criticism of the writing, but it's distracting you from the overall point of the story: Scoobies, Faith, Terminator, Hellmouth. Faith learning how to breach a house isn't necessarily a bad thing to write about, but it distracts you from everything else you're trying to say.

In addition, you're spending too much time describing the SAS and its stuff: again, not necessarily bad, but it's in a bad point in the story. I'd recommend the whole SAS thing as a spinoff, a later section, or something entirely different, but NOT where it's at right now. After all, a story centered around Sunnydale, CA shouldn't really be telling you how someone gets recruited to British special forces.

Just my two bits on the whole thing.

This is a) damn good and b) really under-reviewed. Here's to fixing the second part!

A couple critiques: so far, I think you've done a good job of keeping the protagonists' powers (Scoobies, Xander, Faith) in line with their enemies. However, there's always a temptation to keep 'adding' things, so if you do, (say, one of the crazy-ass Scooby inventions works) try to balance it out with an equivalent weakness or up the antagonists.

Also, don't be afraid to invent new antagonists. With the good guys using mortal know-how to solve problems, what's stopping the bad guys from doing the same? Alternately, how about smarter vampires? Instead of vamps that kill with teeth, what about ones that rely on guns and knives, and actually work together? Perhaps a military unit that got turned, or simply the Scoobies' "evil counterparts" - geeks or other average Joes that got turned but kept their common sense? Don't limit yourself to canon opponents, in other words.

Wow! Great chapter. Definitely worth the wait. I enjoyed the fight scenes but I'm really looking forward to the main plot you've been hinting at. The whole 'war' thing. Sounds awesome! Keep up the good work!

Fantastic story, deserves way, way more reviews then it has. This current chapter has things moving along nicely, although I'm not entirely sure about the new characters. I kind of like them, but I'm not too sure if they're OC's or a crossover with another series, too many crossovers would be so-so, but at the moment the current seem to be meshing together pretty well. Also are the British troops from another series or is this a canon event?

Hope to see more.

A truly incredible story. I love the way you have hinted at so many crossovers but haven't cluttered the story with them. Overall it's very well written and your characterisation is first class. Your use of accents is also fantastic as it really helps develop a voice for your characters.

I must ask though why you are using the SAS in the story. I personally am a huge fan of them, being Australian, but it seems to have come out of the blue. Also will this be a solely British force or will we see NZ and Aus involved as well? Loving this story and looking forward to more eagerly!

Elgin

This is amazing stuff.

I love it.

I'd be more detailed, but it's half one in the morning and i'm tired. I'll leave a better review tomorrow!

jpdt19

Interesting. It seems like the Initiative are staffed with and are commanded by rejects. Getting rid of the so called"non human amateurs"? I wonder how long it will take before they piss off a powerful coven and get themselves flayed and diced.

I noticed you only had a few reviews - I thought you had a lot more last time I checked? Huh. Anyway, as you were lacking, just though I would add my own kudos to the story. Looking forward to more whenever you get it done.

Intresting concept, and well written, I like the way your writing Travers. The gun use in the story matches that in the movies i.e completly ridiculous and unrealistic but that's not really a serious issue.

Looking forward to more of this.

just found your story mate and it's a great start hope to read more soon. does Xander happen to know how to build some energy weapons perhaps? since in the movie the Terminators were equipped with them hopefully he has some blueprints of them stored in his brain.

keep up the great writing mate.

Very nice interlude... liking your take on the Ripper/Giles dynamic...

PS: did you intentionally choose an Electra-Glide for Xanman, did you change it from the 1990 Fatboy from T2? Or did you mistake the make of bike? Not nitpicking- seriously curious. :)