|Reviews for Love Is All About Muscle Science|
| Misha 4/22/13 . chapter 10
| Misha 4/22/13 . chapter 9
This was by far my favorite chapter. 3
| J5TRXIII 4/21/13 . chapter 19
I read it all in one day, and was goshing at how awesome it was XD. I love this story you write so freak beautifully.
| Llamachick 4/20/13 . chapter 19
I really liked this story. Very very very well done. :3
| KatsumiRose24 4/20/13 . chapter 19
I am officially into this couple now, thanks to this awesome story right here. Haha, love it and I literally stayed up all night to read it. Great job, man!
| saphie12 4/19/13 . chapter 19
Just finished reading this entire story due to someone on tumblr drawing a cute lil art of KevEdd awhile ago and stating this story was the reason why she started drawing that couple. xD Even though there were some grammar errors and some inconsistent tenses in some of the chapters, I must admit this was definitely a good story and plot. ] Thank you for finishing it! I know it's immensely hard to finish stories since we all get busy ]
This is was an adorable fic and the way you portrayed Edd and Kevin was spectacular ] Continue writing and I look forward to more of some KevEdd stories from you. ]
| Guest 4/19/13 . chapter 19
| Nightzs 4/19/13 . chapter 8
I've been reading this and OMG ;A;
THE FEELS EVERYWHERE!
| HACHIKO777 4/19/13 . chapter 19
Amazing I honestly enjoy this paring but there simply isnt enough people willing to write it out. :) great job
| Abby 4/17/13 . chapter 4
omg, some of the situations are so awkward, i just got a major case of second-hand embarrassment, i just couldn't, this is so adorable. at one point i had to walk away for a few minutes to compose myself, gosh, it was just so awkwardly adorable
| hiyapapaya 4/15/13 . chapter 19
| kidsgotguns 4/14/13 . chapter 6
Hello, I really am enjoying this story as I read each chapter, however this chapter threw me a little bit. Maybe at the beginning of the chapter put a warning for violence / bullying. Just to warn readers of the graphic bullying happening. I've been beaten because of who I am in school and this scene kind of snuck up on me. Just a little warning at the top of the chapter maybe? Please?
And just a writers note, you don't have to put "if you remember her from earlier chapters ", when you mentioned a character you haven't talked about in a while. I remember her, don't worry!
This story has been really adorable so far! Thank you for writing it! :)
| Gyrokid15 4/14/13 . chapter 19
loved the work! keep it up. :)
| Not A Fan 4/14/13 . chapter 13
I...really could not get through this story, hon. I'm really sorry, I actually couldn't even get through this chapter; the more I read, the less that I liked it.
While I do believe in interpretation of characters for each writer, I can't get through this characterization at all. Ed and Eddy's roles in the story have been incredibly minimalized. Eddy's personality seems more in good humor than true to who he is with an actual plot. Double D's personality seems to flip, with no real syntax that's true to his character, other than a few "certainlys" thrown here and there. I've read a few stories that utilize his broad range of vocabulary and feel more true to him, rather than spreading it out in nineteen chapters that also seem very...downplayed. Yes, Double D is nerdy, but he's still a teenage boy that's incredibly smart. There's no real feel of his personality, other than he's weak, gets pushed a lot, and holds his feelings in. Nothing about who he was attracted to previously, his current state of mind. Calling him feminine feels more like an insult this character if anything because it felt as though he can't be a true character in a couple until he's snivelling like a girl.
It serves as a foil for Kevin's personality, but not a very good one. Literally all I can grasp from him is that he grunts and that he's supposed to be masculine. Nazz's personality as well, I especially did not like. The way she was portrayed seemed incredibly unrealistic, that she would be more concerned about Kevin not spending time with her rather than the fact Double D *just got beat up.* She's ditsy in the show and her actions are questionable, but she's also shown to be incredibly athletic aside from cheerleading and actually nice/at least tolerant of the Eds. I don't know too sure since I couldn't make it to the end, but literally the only characters that seem to exist other than the "kids from the culdesac" are Kevin, Double D, and Nazz, with the other Eds to a VERY MINIMUM extent. While I'm not saying you should have displayed all of the kids, little mentions of more than just the former three and the latter two would have been more interesting. Does Ed talk to Sarah? What's Johnny 2x4 feel? Weren't Rolf and Kevin good friends?
Your OC, Jacky, did not seem necessary. The summarized plot explains Kevin and Double D being uncanny lab partners. Even the nurse had better characterization than her, with less lines and even anonymous. "Jacky" had more personality than both Kevin and Double D, which felt more distracting than at all helpful. It would have been easy to address as a "science teacher" with unlikely coincidences that made Double D feel miserable. The more I heard from her, the less I cared. Plenty of the parts tempted me to simply skim over them and go to the next chapter.
The beginning was established as a third-person point of view, with an omniscient narrative. However, another thing that drew me out of the story were the little "I'lls" and "we'll" that were put in the story outside of dialogue. It felt less personal to either of the boys.
The "Fangirls" in this chapter were absolutely pointless and unrealistic. You could have easily brought another homosexual guy in there, unnamed, or a classmate that supported them. I literally got to that point before giving up and having to write this review. Your grammar for the most part is subpar, but it's clear that the story is written by a teenager, feels unorganized, and does not feel satisfying in the bit.
I really did want to like this story, but I couldn't. I'm really sorry /3
| Hibiki2209 4/13/13 . chapter 19
I enjoyed this very much. Thank you! I'm sad that it ended, but all good things must come to an end.