This story is amazing, the description, doesn't get boring like it does in most stories. it makes you feel a bit sick.. but it's so good you have to read more. i agree with shadowgal98, it was too gruesome to put in the T section, yo should change the rating to M. other than that, great story.

I feel guilty I didn't see this story sooner. Ran into it, actually, when I was prowling on my .

First of all, I want to commend you as absolutely wonderful. Seriously. Your descriptions, as I have mentioned over a million times over, are so vivid they just make my jaw drop. The emotion you exerted into this and the way you kept the character close to his original self, amazing job. And something as little as putting real decisive charisma to even the minor characters makes the story that much more intense and lovely, but of course in that most disturbing of ways.

"And at last, he felt. Blood flooded into his mouth, coating his teeth a fine crimson, the taste a bitter sensation on his tongue. It reminded him of pain. Wasn't that the word for it?"

Lines such as these make me feel like I'm tasting the actual blood in my mouth. Such imagery leaves the marking on a reader, highlighting the tension. It pulls them in, which is exactly what many authors thrive to achieve.

So much kudos I put in this story. Brilliant. Just brilliant.

All seriousness put aside, you're a madballer. *shot*

O.O

O.M.G That was absolutely horrifying. It's just...uhh *shudder*

I loved the way you wrote it, and I also liked how you compared it to greek mythology too.

The only thing is the fact that it was (in my opinion) a bit to grusome to be put in the Teen section; probably scared some cry babies away. ;P

Anyway it was a great story in all. Loved it!