Okay to start with so far I love the plot the story. But the chapterization in my opinion (and this is onlymy opinion) is to choppy itis almost that you are more into cliffhangers than making the story flow smoothly. Again I reitterate that itis a very good story with a great plot...

love it

Wait...WHAT! SKYLAR! God I hope she's going to be okay. And she just met Edward too!

Update as soon as possible

He has to say he loves her plezzzzzzz puppy dog face :: ) lol

Wow. glad those two are talking things through...at least somewhat.:)

You have a good plot bunny, but your story is missing something. You didn't do very much on character introductions and it kinda looks like you're rushing thru your chapters. It's not always a bad thing. You should step out of your writers shoes and reread your story, then put your writers shoes back on and add to. Like I said, you do have a good plot bunny here, it just needs to be developed some more. You didn't have a good beta, you should read some other stories out there and check into their betas.. They have beta profiles for a reason.

Angel

Sweetie, it's right not rite.

I'm glad that Bella is giving Edward the benefit of the doubt and talking with him. It's a conversation that they definitely need to have. They need to start somewhere, and talking is the best way.

he deserved it..

Why is he still with Tanya?

Wow! This story is really good. Reminds me of my ex lol

Please update soon, love your story. mistakes be damned.

This story is fucking awsome so far and ur grammer doesnt suck! i cant wait to c wat happens nxt plez try and update again soon

ducez:)

i think ur story is great so far!