Its amazing to me how sometimes you read a story and get so much impact from so few words...

These three little sentences that made a huge impact for me reading the story:

"I never got to say goodbye to her, that same day her father sent her to live with his sister in Encino.

Months later a young couple moved in to the vacant house.

The tree house stayed empty."

Something about that empty treehouse made me so very sad. The end of something special, something that couldn't be recaptured or repeated.

And then your last paragraph: "That stubbornness was what brought her up against the man who would eventually kill her."

Well, if that doesn't paint a rosy picture - my heart is broken for Deeks already! On one hand, I was thrilled that a male and female were portrayed as best friends and not lovers, and then on the other, she's DEAD. :(

:o) - Wonderful start, can't wait to see where this story goes...

I really love the little stories you pulled in here. Have no idea about Jess, having not seen season 2 yet, grumble grumble, but I do really love your writing.

I was going to say that the frog pond story was my favourite, but then I remembered the dad and grandma being in cahoots so I don't know that I can pick a favourite.

Would love to hear some more little stories about Jess and Marty from their early years. I hope you continue this.

It was fun to read (the beginning half was, the end sad but still good) after a hard time editing a chapter of my own story, so thanks for that.

This. Is. AWSOME!

I really really really really hope you update soon!

xxx Shelly

:clicks story to favs, grinning like a happy cat: