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   geororo 3/10/12 . chapter 11"It's held in France, it's too far," I laughed out loud when I read that line. XD Anyway, back to business. I've just realised that for a fanfic that's based on the original anime, the personality of the characters to be precise, Hayate seems kinda solemn in certain parts of the story. His lines doesn't really portray his 'Hayate-ness'. "Although the way opportunity presented itself, I guess the twist of fate can be described as lucky." This line for example shows how formal he is, although he was only talking to Nagi. It's not a real problem though...just saying. |
| geororo 3/10/12 . chapter 10 With the exception of a few typos; excellent. Simply excellent. Keep up the good work. |
| Butterfree 11/21/11 . chapter 2 Hayate turning into an assasin would be pretty epic... Great story so far! Really matches the mood of the series. CupidKirby |
| mephitos 11/14/11 . chapter 9 This is a really fun story. I feel the characters act the way you would expect them to act. Nagi is adorable as always and Hayate is dense as always. I also like the flow of the story. Everything comes together nicely. Anyways great job and it is a pleasure to read your writing. |
| geororo 11/6/11 . chapter 9 The chapter's perfect, except for one part. You can improve the layout of the story by putting a few phrases by each other to create a good paragraph... That isn't too shabby either. It would actually look a lot better if you did that. p.s. Not to be confused with making a wall of texts. |
| NeutronFreak62 10/24/11 . chapter 8 I hope you write more. |
| Flare Region 10/17/11 . chapter 7 Whoa. That was a good chapter! And the suspense is great. As for criticism, I can't really criticize anything. Everything seemed alright. Update soon please! |
| Flare Region 10/1/11 . chapter 6 Sweet! An update! I like this story! This is really good! Update soon please! |
| Flare Region 9/16/11 . chapter 5 Whoa. This is reaaly good. You're a really good writer. Update soon please! |
| geororo 9/12/11 . chapter 5 Whoa...total plot twist. John's the bad guy? Didn't see that coming. Anyway, keep up the good work and update soon. Like I said before, I wondered why's there so few people reviewing this... |
| geororo 1/18/11 . chapter 4 A neutral chapter...nice... |
| Rie fan 12/2/10 . chapter 3 Nice story I like it, and I agree with geororo A-tan should go there and nagi and her have a huge fight and oh ya john is soooo not interested in maids :) |
| geororo 12/2/10 . chapter 3 OMG! This is a really great story. Why's there not many reviews posted here? You deserved better than this, TehSanity. Can't wait for your next chapter. Will A-tan make her appearance in this story? |
| xXx 11/12/10 . chapter 2 Keep up the good work .. Its the best Hayate fanfic I have read ..Surprisingly well written though you could at a bit of romance to it :D |
| geororo 11/10/10 . chapter 2 LOL! Geez, I really thought that this was really a murder, but it actually turned out to be something else! You've got me there! I cant wait for your next chapter _ |
