ok, this is awesome stuff. I need to read more of this, this is defiantly a new idea. Please update soon!

Wow, this story really f*cking sucks. Like really badly. Why do you even write? You can't get the characters down right and your dialogue is puke worthy. I'm sorry I wasted any minute reading this trash. You really suck as a writer, sh*tbag.

great jobbb! love it!

I think this is off to a VERY good start. I'm excited for the next chapter and to see what happens!

what if your pathetic biginning of your disgustingly unoriginal story made me want to barf?