There are a lot of errors, however, for someone writing in a language not their native one, you did great. Better than a lot of those writing in their native English. I would send you the corrections, however, I only have an Android phone, and Android tablet, right now. If you wish, I will do that, regardless. I have a better command of the language than most seem to, anyway. Where are you from; which language is your first? I commend you for the bravery it takes to do something of this sort; it is very impressive. The story, by the way, is very good.:)

Awesome second chapter. please update soon.(:

Very good beginning. Please update soon.(: