Nice! I /love/ the ending, when McKenna is thinking. The whole chapter is a good ending, but now I'd like to see what happens to McKenna, Bobby, and Karr... I guess we'll see in the next story, eh?)

aw, nice wrap up. It makes you feel warm like you just drank a barrel of hot cocoa. Though I'm slightly confused on some wording. if we're at Makenna's POV, then how does she know Michael's first wife was Stevie, if she didn't even know he'd had a first wife until then and never said her name? But that's a very minor confusion. I like the quotes at the end, it seemed to give it a more 'official' feeling that that was the end (or beginning?).

Glad your brother is alright now, also.

It was nice. I'm waiting for the sequel!)

Just re-read the whole thing)Hope you update soon Keep the great writing coming.

Sorry it took me so long to review. Haven't had internet for a few weeks! It's nice to get some conclusions, but I'll also be kinda sorry to see the story end. I liked the dash of panic when she realized she didn't have a plan. It's something I would do, lol. I think your action scenes are fine. I think as you keep practicing writing them, you'll get better. Another thing I would recommend, beyond reading and watching action things would be reading manga or graphic novels, and how they accomplish conveying action. Anything that works for you as good way to get a picture in your head of what you want it to look like so you can find the words you want to say.

Aw, happy endings! I think Lowry died a bit too easily for all the trouble he caused, but other than that it is very good.)

You might hate it, but I don't. Nay, quite the opposite The action scene was OK, I would have maybe focused more on the landscape while they fight (just giving a hint that it's not so horizontal that's why the knife would fall).

Anyway, why is Bobby taken home with McKenna by the police while they have their cars?

Oh, that was just fine. It's just a shame that Ethan's dead- might have been better if he'd stewed in a maximum security prison for the rest of his life, thinking about losing his 'perfect' plan. Oh well, doesn't stop me from loving this story!

If they make a big screen kr movie this is how they do it. Epic job! I think glen larson would impressed. Im not on here to often plz email me crazy_legz_2005 yahoo. Com when you get the next chpt up. Again can say how much i enjoy this:)

God speed, McKenna. X)

Chaos is fun, lol. Exciting chapter, looking forward to more! I think you do a pretty darn good job with action sequences. Keep up the good work!

God speed, McKenna. X)

Ooooh, McKenna's protective side made an appearance! Ethan had better watch out! I hope they can stop him before he goes over the cliff! Update soon!

Good as always. I feel it's about the end of the... well, not the story, but maybe the end of the pilot episode?

Thank you for changing the super pursuit mode. That was my main complaint about the final season of the show is when it went more sci-fi then it was before. I mean, obviously, the show was sci-fi all the way, but the writers went overboard with that. Love the story.