Loving this so far. I had been afraid I'd found and read all the good Shinoten romances. I see you haven't updated in a while. I hope you plan to finish this. It has a lot of promise and you're a great writer.

Keen to see what happens next. :)

This story is shaping up to be interesting. Hope you keep it up!

Great chapter! I'm curious as to how the plot will develop, I spotted a couple of spelling errors so you may want to read it out loud before you publish the next one.

Taking a turn for the more serious plot-wise! I think you handled introducting a difficult topic well and stuck very true to character, I'm looking forward to continuing to read this _ (Only thing I'd say was you repeated yourself about Tenten's cooking skills a bit much, she only really needed to lament them once)

I hope you continue this story. I like your grasp of both TenTen's inner monologue and Shino's syntax- both have a very authentic feel to them. Looking forward to the next chapter- update soon!

I think you have a great first chapter going. I laughed at how well the characters were in character! [Aka Lee's Dynamic Entry #5!]

Please keep writing, I loved it!

-Alice

It's really sweet that you cite me as one of your inspirations! _

I really like this story, the characterisations are good you certainly have the characters quirks down including Shino's which can be difficult to pinpoint, the plot flows well and I think it has alot of potential... I really hope you continue it!