To Rae Simmons
Hey. Even if this review is like four years old, it's still a valid point. Writing the throne-room felt pretty awkward, but it was just how I pictured it at the time for whatever reason. A desk would have made much more sense. As to Elrond knowing or not knowing them, I imagined he knew OF them, but maybe didn't know Gilraen personally, or at least well enough to recognize her. (I DID at least have him say that he knew Arathorn II well.) But you're probably right, he was probably much more familiar with all of those people.(Responding now because I just now received another review explaining how my thirteen-year-old self didn't read Tolkien closely enough and happened to see this one again too.
So, uh, you're right?

To the anonymous keymasher who commented immediately before me
I apologize if you began this story thinking it was a solidly researched and faithful fleshing out of Tolkien. In actuality, it is a story written by a lazy and bored 13-year-old (ten years ago, btw, so the criticism seems that much more irrelevant). At the time, I wanted to throw something into the story to move it along, have some action, conflict, etc. So I asked myself, WHAT IF Aragorn spent some of his time growing up with the Dunedain too, instead of staying only in Rivendell all the time? Why did I ask that? Because I couldn't think of anything else to write him doing in Rivendell.

And actually, I still don't think it's that implausible that he would spend some time with the ranger families, even if Tolkien didn't mention is specifically. I still don't have him officially move out of Rivendell until 20, as per Tolkien's timeline.

I'm not sure how carefully you read what I wrote in this chapter (maybe you just threw your hands up at the mention of him leaving Rivendell and skimmed through, waiting for the insanity to end, and that's fair enough), but I did actually say that it was just a visit. One year. And then he goes back to Rivendell. After that, he sometimes he visits the Dunedain (much shorte visits), accompanied by Elrond and Elrohir, but mostly he lives in Rivendell. Until he turns 20, as you said, and then he begins traveling.

So, in summary, my reaction to this random nitpicking is: ...So what?

Aragorn was 20 years old when he left rivendell to live with the dunadains not 12.

I really liked it alot, but sth. keeps bothering me. When he's already 20 years old, you call him a boy. And he acts like a boy even when he's 20. apart from that and occasional mistakes in grammer or sentence structure, i think its really good. And i mean it. Read my profile if you don't believe me. Anyway, you should continue it, Aragorn's later life.

Hey! Even if this story is like five years old that still doesn't fit. Elrond didn't have a throne, they would have first seen him behind a desk. Also Elrond would know who they were, because he had dealings with them before and they are the people of his twin.

I liked this story of yours! And I liked your writing style...

Beautiful piece of work! Wonderful.

nice

Yes, it is maia, not mia. That was a mistake. But Elladan and Elrohir's age is not. They are definitely not under 20. In fact, they were born in Year 139 of the Third Age, and Aragorn was born Year 2,931. Quite an age difference. That means that when The Lord of the Rings begins, the twins are 2,988 years old. They're full-grown, but still somewhat young for Elves.

This doesn't really matter, but i'm pretty sure Elladan and Elrohir are less than 20 years old(you said that everyone but Gilraen and Estel were less than 20)

It's very good so far, but i think its supposed to be Maia, not Mia)

Ch. 2 Aragorn is so sweet!

great

Wow, you're right, this is such an ambitious project in scope! However, it is so very obvious that you are up to the task! I loved every word, and particularly the way you've blended passages from the book with your own story. This story gives me insight into Aragorn that I haven't found elsewhere. Thanks for that.

Joanna

I'm in awe. I'm so very glad you deemed it right to return and round this up, regardless of your lowly thoughts of it.

I think you do not understand the power you wield. Yikes I'm sounding too much like the common speech of Middle Earth.

This story was far better than you thought. I read a lot, it is part of my job and part of a passion I've had years to shape, I'm almost embarrassed to think of all I have written compared to what you write at the mere age of 14.

I can honestly say I have not yet read anything that is more truthful to Aragorn, Arwen, Elrond, Elladan, Elrohir and Tolkien than yours. Yet this is the first work of yours I've read. If at all possible I wish you could continue with this, where he went on to, where her thoughts of him took her and whence their love solidified in defiance of all that was "right" for them and all they had the "right" to.

My heart wishes you could write more, for you seem to spell the words Tolkien left dangling for us in relation to all these characters, and the difficulties of their choices and their relations to each other. Err and please write in some of that delicious elf too, well the Nordic arrow shoting mesmerising leggy Legolas, yikes the list goes on doesn't it?)