Very cool! _ I love the imagery you used in this. I just learned about alliteration (or at least I learned the term) in English this past week, and I actually see it here. *applauds* Miraculous, really...anyway very nice. The only thing I'd say is that without the note it's not entirely clear what you mean. I like it how it is now, personally, but in the future perhaps put some extra explanation inside the poem? I think it'd be beneficial. :) Just a suggestion, though

Thanks for reviewing my poem! :) I love to hear comments-and I especially like when people sign the reviews so I can see work like this! _ I hope to see more from you soon! MJ

cool, very good and like the olde english stuff.

In my opinion, it made sense. Nice work. ;)