Awwwwww...cute...HEY YAHIKO! *waves and jumps up and down*...

This fic is a little confusing, although well-written. It seems that you've chosen to plunge us right in the middle of the action. This is a fine device to use, but you have to be careful to slip in background where you can, otherwise idiots like me get lost. Please slip in more background to the plot in the next chapter. Also, perhaps you could clear up the difference between character's inner thoughts and your narration. Good start.

wonderful...I loved it...but isn't kenshin the 14th master of hiten?...the yahiko should be the 15th...oh nooo! kenshin has TB?...aaaaaahhhh! quick! collapse one of his lungs and pump him full of antibiotics...!...anway...great writing you have here...keep it up...

i like this story alot! please continue it! i want to see what happens. what does Kenshin have? consumption? they actually came up with a cure for it around that time, i read. i could be wrong, and i don't know about in Japan, but england and such... anyway, please keep going!