NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! It ended unfinished on a cliffhanger! Aw man…

That was great though! I REALLY liked it! I mean Jak pretty much NEVER seemed that sad in the games at all! C'mon his father just DIED! (composes self) Anyways that was awesome! You should really at least CONSIDER continuing this!

That was a joke, ha ha, fat chance

I see what you did there, and so does GLAD0S

DUuuuuuDueuuuuuede.: Update quicker you kur! (Lolm, I learnt that in Shakespeare ,) but pleeeeaaaaaaasssseeeeee... I miss your awesome chapi-ness.:

I can review this chapter? Wait, I can review! YES! I CAN REVIEW! Anyway... I loved the longer-ness of this chapter and the whole part of when you explained what boredom led to... That made me You know... All together I really like this whole idea... Ya know? Going back, reading the plot a bit more... Brushing up on it... Yeah, I like it a lot.:) Lolm, awesome chapter, it was sexier then sliest bread! And sliest bread it PRETTY sexy!XD

Holy ice cream sandwiches that was feakaty cool I want to be your friend please amber the 8 grader peace otties

The donkey's name is Eeyore

Damn I hate cliffhangers can't stand suspense drives me mad hope u update soon I wanna see how samos reacts :)

Wow, what a chapter! I LOVED IT! it was sooo deep and amazing I can't wait for you to update, I HATE CLFFHANGERS! I LOVE WRITING Em... ;) but HATE reading them! PLEASE UPDATE SOON YOU EVIL ELF! LOL, love you and your story:)

Your loyal friend and fan,

CuZ D)

Grrrrrrrrrrr! *flips out a hidden blade like the one's from Assassin's Creed* (Sorry, just finished the three games and I LOVE them, I'd rape them if they were humanXD) BUT anyway, it's fine, carry on:) take your time... Then hurry up! I want a new chapter!... Please?XD Lol, but really, take your time, I'm also abit lazy with my stories, haven't updated in a week? I think:? But type woman, type!:)

I love it the only criticism I will give is to come out with the next one as soon as possible

Ahhhhh! It was so awesome! And bloody! And evil! And kinky... In a violent wayXD! I really liked it cause it was a lovely chapter, it wasn't short man, it was awesome:) shame, poor Jak, and poor Keria? Is she dead or not:? Hmmm... I wanna know! can't wait for chapter 12:D whoop whoop!)

You rockz still!

CuZ D,

YOU BUM! YOU LEAVE ME HERE, AS SOON AS I GET AN ACCOUNT BECAUSE OF YOU AND NOW, I GET ALL EXCITED KNOWING YOU ARE *FINALLY* BACK AND YOU LEAVE A CLIFFHANGER!... Truly evil, just the way I love you;)XD Haha, I'm SO happy you're back:) and we Arn't mad at you at all, we all deserve a break sometimes, especially you for working so hard:) I loved the chapter, especially because it made me laugh and smile:) I love your new logo though, it's K.I.C.K.A.S.S.!XD I'm so glad you're back, you've just brightened my day, can't wait for chapter 11! It's gonna rock, naturally:)

You rockz so bloodiz hard!XD

Your forever loyal and loving fan,

CuZ D:)

P.S. Did I mention that you rock?XD

:D luv it and i luv how u made jak react with the lil' voice in jaks head :3

Ha! When he's not hurting himself Daxter is bringing about the apocalypse! Good description and action for C, she creeps me out just reading about her. Poor Daxter, he needs some re-assurance and a friend to snap out of it!

Well, Daxter could go two ways with this. It can either be a sexy little adventure or a total nightmare! (grammar is still an issue, but the story is still great) Daxter is going to have to start using that uncommon sense, yes?