Wow... I was just blown away by this fic - probably one of the fics best I've read. Incredibly well written - the language is wonderful and the delicate balance between description, dialog and forwarding the story is perfectly maintained. Everyone is so in-character, you seem to capture their essence really well - plus your charname is very interesting, too. I also love how you have integrated in-game dialogue into the fic - it's fun to recognize lines you'd know in your sleep, and it also ties your story nicely to the game, with the additions and modifications to the original dialog keeping things fresh. Keep the awesome work up, I'm eagerly waiting for continuation! :)

Good chapter! I liked the description of the protagonist finally getting to have a bath after Irenicus. I thought the slower pacing worked well for the chapter, allowing the reader a closer look at the different characters in the story. I liked it. :)

Hey, what a great start! Excellent writing, love the change of perspective, realistic interactions. I am intrigued. Yoshimo romances are rare, and the fact that you believe more than one emotional bond is possible makes it even better. I am polyamorous myself, so this made me super excited :) Also, I love how your Charname projects a certain air of power, makes it all more realistic in the context of the story. Can't wait for more, will definitely keep on reading! Cheers, Pontenigra

A Yoshimo romance; very interesting. :) I liked Nalia's point of view in this chapter and how you wrote about her experiences before the party turned up-her perspective was very enjoyable and interesting to read. I also liked Anomen in this, and the introduction of the Bhaalspawn through the other characters' eyes seemed good and dramatic. Very nice chapter.

Salve,

I adore the language - very elaborate and elegant. It is difficult to say anything about the story after such a short chapter, but it seems most promising. I shall await the next chapter with anticipation. :)

Vive valeque!