Wow. BOOM ending. Only criticism is that the remarks just after the opening were a wee bit simplistic... not sure they fit in with the sophisticated style (metaphors, puns) of the entire piece, though of course the information imparted is important.

Wow. Pure poetry!

Woah this is angsty! Beautiful written, very powerful!

Wow, that was angsty, but the good kind. Really well written.

Wow! What an amazing story, terrific writing, very captivating and intense! I like the angst. Great take on their relationship and the effect her will to protect them unfortunately had on her life. I loved it! Thanks for sharing.)

ooh this is good

Ouch, that's painful. Of course, that means I loved it.