I tired to read the whole thing, got lost many many times, but i tired...what happened?

I didn't read the entire thing...I'm sure it would be interesting but there are too many gramatical errors. I recommend that you find someone to edit your work for you.

Don't be discouraged...just get those grammar problems worked out.

You knoe, I only read part of this, but there are so many errors and spelling mistakes that I couldn't possibly follow it. It's to hard to understand. Re-write it.