That's so... so... cold! I'm so shocked that it ended that way. I mean, I could see why she would be scared, but I suppose that some of the bluntness of her words is not how I expected her to say (in that certain way, at least). I felt that Linguini's emotions were spot-on, though. Well done!

I thought your idea for this story was unique and interesting, and you definitly wrote it well.

However, I just feel like this is something that wouldn't happen, and it's a little out of character for them, so for those reasons I didn't really like it. Like I said before, though, you did a good job writing it.

Beautifully dark. There are no words proper enough to describe this piece accurately. Well done, you have my upmost respect.

KingofJesters