nice

Okay, aside from the many, MANY ass-pulls you had in this chapter that damn near ruined the story for me, I like the idea. That being said, there was also the moments of character OOC-ness, nut that can easily be handwaved as the were needed for impact on the story. May I suggest, also, that in the future you give the readers some idea that a new character has come into view. Don't just say they talked and everyone suddenly noticed them, say they spoke a few words, people turned, noticed that person-whom must have been out of sight otherwise someone would have seen them-and then have them continue what they were saying. Sorry for the tangent, but I really think the story could have been much better if it were worded slightly differently. You have a skill with writing nonetheless-I wouldn't be reading all the way to the end if you didn't-and I can see a lot of potential in you. To put it simply: your ideas are good, but you need experience. I look forward to reading more of your stories as you improve.

Hey! An extra! I thought the story's done? Meh, I'm ok

Thanks for replying, Kiera!

Congrats on completing your first (I think) story... OwO

Just asking... are they only 2 personalities in Blitzwing now? What happened to Random?

Midnight Marquis

P.S. I knew it But I was fooled... XD

Poor Sari... hope she gets better (emotionally)...
Update soon!

Heh. I really like your take on the characters in this. Keep it up! :D

Who's that black and white ninjabot? Is it Prowl? I don't think it's him, since he died... but he's my best bet.
Where did Sentinel go? Sorry, just curious.

Update soon!

This fic is pretty intense, I'm loving it!
And who is this mysterious ninja-bot?

Please update soon!

This story is GOOD! I couldnt stop reading it through in one shot and was so dissapointed when I couldnt continue.
Unique plot, good writting, maybe more details would improve the fic? And I really apreciate the unbiased distribution of the limelight to the various characters instead of focusing on only one or two.
Update soon! :D

In the first chapter it sounded like they were going to try and bring Prowl back, and then in the second chapter it is 30 years later. I take it that they weren't able to get the shards in time? As for the rest of the story it seems interesting I hope that you update again soon.

Sentinel shouldn't have said that... Blitzwing may take him to his word.

Update soon!
Midnight Marquis

P.S. Happy Valentine's Day

"Some explaining to do"... A bit dubious, but I understand where they're coming from. It's not all the time someone sees more than one Blitzwing.
Nice move, Optimus;D

And I take it Ultra Magnus's dead? If so, who's Random going after next? I hope he's reunited with Hothead and Icy...
Update soon

Midnight Marquis

Oh... this is interesting... really interesting indeed...
How did I miss this?
So... Random's the default. And now he's running loose. Lots of suspense you got there... Oh, and Sentinel, in my opinion, is a jerk. No wonder Random ran off.

Update soon!

Your story is labled as having Optimus Prime and Blitzwing as the main characters of the story, yet just from reading this short chapter it seems to me that it's about some oc or stu like guy based of of Sari. When labeling your fanfics, do so correctly so peolple know what their getting into. I for one have no interest in reading oc based stories and there's plenty of others who don't like to either. Do state that there's os's in the story.