Oh wow, this was a great story to read! It works so perfectly with the book! Great job
lilaclila

I really liked acts five and six...act five because Jane finally saw the consequences of his actions to Lisbon and to the Team, really well done...and act six because of his realization of what he had to do to be happy and start living again...great job!)

Hi LizfromItaly,

I loved this story, you made a very good job.

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Awe! Definitely my favorite chapter. I love it when there's a happy Jisbon ending. The kiss was so sweet and I like Carol. She was funny. I'm gonna miss this story so much. Thanks for writing it and for the wonderfull complement at the beginning. Liz, you rock!)

If it wasn't so late, I'd be cheering right now. LOVED the last chapter of the story. I loved everything about it, I could write pages and pages why I loved it. But I won't. GREAT ENDING! :D

You were right. This episode was so sad. So heart-breaking. It made me cry. When I heard the team talking about him, kind of made me hate him, but at the end it was so sad. Glad he wants to change. I can't wait for the Jisbon fluffy ending.

I have to say that so far this is my favorite chapter. I loved meeting Lisbon's family. They seem fun and sweet. And I like that Jane is finaly coming to his sensess.)

Poor Jane though he was going nuts. lol"Spirit, please, I wish to leave this place and time" Jane begs at closed eyes."Don't blame me, Mr. Jane. I told you these are just shadows of the past, of things that have been. They are what they are; they are what you've made of them."Bring me back, I don't want to see it, I don't want to hear it! But he must see and hear in order to change. This chapter was really sad in a way. Hope he changes soon. More please...

So I guess his Dad is in hell... Paying his own penitation. I really hope that Jane listens. The talk between the two was well written and it made me feel bad for them both. MORE...)

You had a good idea, and i don't see hour that you continue this story.

Good job.

Gracia.

I think Jane's a bit OOC, but I think his emotions are rightly placed)Nice job!

I really liked the prologue and how you set up the story so we, the reader can understand what's going on...great job)

I'm kind of sad that you're writing this. I spent a whole month writing a story just like this, and now I'll feel bad about posting it, 'cause I don't want you to think I'm copying you.

Looking forward to more though.

Hey... Just read both chapters and I think it's a great idea for a story. I have that book! Boy, Jane is being a grinch, huh... Well, a scrooge in this case. I liked that Lisbon was inviting him over and that he at least accepted to himself that he loves her. I can't wait to read more.