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YeCatsJ 12/20/11 . chapter 8
Kinda cute. But too much first person changing and not knowing where the character changes were
Saissister 3/26/11 . chapter 8
awesome!
NEED A NEW LIFE 12/26/06 . chapter 8
That is a good freaken story, and you do not just sto it right there.
anon 11/25/06 . chapter 6
how did he put him in a bed that was wet?
Nirrti 4/22/06 . chapter 8
This was an interesting take on some well used themes; I liked Dumbledore being Minerva's father.

If you wish to develop your writing then I would suggest exploring different ways of saying things. Sometimes if one goes with the first and most direct explanation of what is happening it comes out like a dull list of actions, which this does often. That is not to say that the story is bad - there is a difference between story and writing ability. You have constructed the story adequately (although the ending was somewhat abrupt and the acceptance under explored) but your writing requires much attention.

Good Luck.
darkforces 10/18/05 . chapter 8
Its really good, i love the ending. I think snape was out of caracter, but he tends to be in these fice, on the whole a brilliant story
Calistal 12/14/04 . chapter 8
Hey! Long time no talk. (this is Calistal) My e-mail has changed to theatrechickwehs I'd still like to talk to you. If you have MSN mine is psalmist88 if you have AIM Mine is SweetChick4100 and if you have ICQ mine is 124678397 and if you have Yahoo mine is groovey26 Wow. that's a lot . Well, give me a hollar. I only live about an hour and a half away from you.

DaughteroftheDawn
Lydia Blue 11/14/04 . chapter 8
i love it.
Lady Angelique of mystiqu 10/8/04 . chapter 8
wow that's the end? short and sweet and right to the point! I loved it! Make more!
why should i tell you 10/3/04 . chapter 5
oh my gosh! I love the story. (i haven't even read the chapter yet) but i found out you live in west virginia. so do i.

that is so kewl! well i love the story! it's fabulous.
Pure Black 8/19/04 . chapter 8
ok..weird
tori potter 8/18/04 . chapter 8
all i can say is awsome
hermy 7/26/04 . chapter 8
If u do don't rite a sequel i swear i will personally hex u!
BlackAndWhiteMagick 7/3/04 . chapter 8
this is a good story. great job with it.
Serenity Cosmos Riddle 6/10/04 . chapter 8
I wish I could write as great as you! I loved the story!
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