Question 1: are you gonna update anytime soon?

Question 2: so campbell isn't infected? He's immune?

A few things I would do myself to make this an easier read is fix grammatical slips-stuff like ellipses (..., not ..), dashes (double them for speech breaks and single them for combined words, like green-blue), and dialogue snippits (if the sentence following the speech is related, like "Hey," she said, then there's a comma. If it's something like "Hey." She smacked him on the arm indignantly, there's a period.) I would also suggest avoiding passive voice ("the city was burned by the dragon" instead of "the dragon burned the city") unless it's to convey some sort of panic or feeling of disembodiment, like: "My lips smiled as my heart pumped with rage," the lips smiling being that she isn't actually happy.

It would probably be more effective to develop original characters by slowing down the story and showing their backstory rather than telling it. Or, if you don't want to go that far back with your characters and start the story here, don't bother telling the events that happened but show them, such as someone mentions Darien and all of them go quiet, rather than explaining why (of course, explanations have to come some time, but let them simmer enough and try to display them through actions, dialogue, thoughts, etc.

I'll read more later-gonna miss my bus for work-and I'll give more happy thoughts!

The introduction is from The Devil Wears Prada's newest EP, Zombies. I thought I recognized it.

Im on my phone right now, so I cant leave a big reply. I just wanted to say that I dont read OC stories a lot (I should, though, Oc Is all I write x3), but Im glad I took the time to read this one. So far it is completely worth it, and Im excited for the next chapter. Keep on truckin'!

There's not much to say except that I think I'm a bit masochist because I love the atmosphere you're describing - the tension, the fear and all Nice writting style by the way !

Hope you update soon )

See you

Oh my goodness! I didn't think you would actually make an update just to answer my review! I just thought you'd, like, make a small note in chapter 3 or something :O

I'm really glad that you aren't crazy-mad at me or anything, and I'm glad you and the german get along! But I just got so mad at him for saying the things he did and I just had to write something to him, but now I realize it might've been to harsh :O

I actually think I've seen this story on fictionpress, but with a different summary perhaps (can't remember) and I'm probably gonna go an re-read it over there as an original story! :)

Thanks for answering me, and I'm sorry you had to make an update to get hold of me! I'm looking forward to more updates from you!

Merry christmas/Happy holidays! :)

Yeah, it's me again... I might've done something stupid, but I just had to ask why your angry german-reviewer had to lash out at you (since you are his only reviewer) about your translation (instead of ,like, helping you correct them, but he hate yaoi (prob. a homophobe)) and if he decides to lash out at you again, it'll probably be my fault...

I'm sorry :(

Well... You write really good, but don't you think this story belong on fictionpress? So far you haven't mentiond any of the special infected and you don't use the original characters from the game.

I read your other story with the *hunter* and the german guy, (I haven't reviewed it yet, altough I am a bit confused about where chapter 7 went) and I understand this is a companion-piece to that story. I don't think you should stop writing this, but since it doesn't feature any of my favourite zombies or humans _yet_, the story is just ... well, it haven't gotten that interesting so far.

I'll admit I got a bit worried when I saw you updating a new story ("Oh no, now her other hunter-story won't be updated!") and I realy don't think you should take what that german grammar-nazi says to heart, you did say you didn't know any german and that you used google translate!

Good luck with your stories! :)