|Reviews for Apprentices|
| Totenkinder Madchen 1/20/11 . chapter 3
Ha! Well, it's inevitable that I'd love Storm Shadow getting into it with the kitchen staff, but that little exchange really made me laugh out loud. You have a gift for establishing setting-and adding in all the little details that make it come to life-without trying too hard or whacking the reader over the head with it. Well done.
And this promises to be interesting, in a catastrophic sense . . .
| CrystalOfEllinon 1/20/11 . chapter 3
Sneaky bastard...Tommy enjoys tormenting superiour officers (with the exception of the Tomahawk) more than is really sane. Poor Flint. Also, apprentices. Heh.
Making Kamakura squirmawesome. I can HEAR that tone of voice...because my sensei has used it on smart-mouthed or disrespectful students before. The hair on the back of my neck stood up reading that bit, just like it does when hearing sensei chewing someone out.
Also, terrifying the cooks. They really shouldn't be so jumpy. Storm was doing them a favor. They'll thank him later when they don't freak out and die in an attack.
One last note; Dish Tetris. I LOLed:)
Enjoyed muchly, as always!
| PhantomEmpress 1/20/11 . chapter 3
Why do i get the feeling this is gong to turn into a ridiculously awesome adventure? poor snake, having to go along with Tommy's harebrained schemes...
| bluerose8129yahoo.com 1/19/11 . chapter 3
Love SE's objections to a bad plan. lol. I didn't realize Kamakura was so young...but it does make sense as I re-read the first 2 chapters. Jimx is just wonderful. And Storm is just...Storm. lol. he is wonderful while plotting. please keep going!
| Katrinka and Nori 1/19/11 . chapter 3
Yay updates! very good chapter, can't wait to see what happens next!
| Ghanie 1/19/11 . chapter 3
I like your Tommy :D
Camping Trip. What could go wrong? Plenty, of course!:D
| zenbon zakura 1/19/11 . chapter 3
tray tower! that was so cool!
| Lady Jaye1 1/19/11 . chapter 3
I'm really looking forward to the camping trip. I loved how Snake Eyes attempted to get out of another of Tommy's half baked schemes, only to get willingly roped into it. The interaction between Tommy and Chef was great as well, especially that he didn't back down from the ninja. You need nerves of steel to run a GI Joe kitchen.
BTW, you had a small typo later in the story. You just forgot the 's' in 'his sensei', in the paragraph where Billy was 'studying' the menu.
| TinySprite 1/19/11 . chapter 3
Nice chapter! If they're squabbling like this here, I can't wait to see what happens when they actually go! I'm getting the feeling of endless 'accidents'.
| Katrinka and Nori 1/5/11 . chapter 2
I like, so PLEASE keep updating!
| Linuxgirl 12/31/10 . chapter 2
Outch, that's going to be some hard learning on a few sides ;-). Even without Tommy's ideas the younger clan members will really have to work a few things out.
Love the interaction between Tommy and Snakes, they really act like brothers.
Well, obviously Billy learned from the best to hit the right button, first his father (who, crazy as he is, does know how to hit verbally) and then from his sensei. Kamakura has really a lot to learn on that part.
Hoping for the next chapter soon.
| Ghanie 12/28/10 . chapter 2
Here's your breakfast: I like where it's going and hope to find out soon what is Tommy's bad idea! :)
| zenbon zakura 12/28/10 . chapter 2
| CrystalOfEllinon 12/27/10 . chapter 2
Ahh, the long awaited shin-kick scene. So much awesome. Don't kick Billy in the shin. Doesn't work out well for you, and he thinks it's funny.
Storm Shadow using his superior knowledge of obscure and archaic kanji as a secret codeBRILLIANCE. Sheer. Brilliance. Sheer, utter genius. He would SO do that.
Jinx's maternal side is cute. Aww. Lookit them trying to break each other's ribs. Aren't they CUTE? Look how they aren't pulling their counterforces. And lookit their footing! Goes all to hell when they get mad! Aww. I LOLed.
Storm and Snake both in Sensei Mode at the same time, and collaborating on dealing with their apprentices, was priceless. Love it. And of course, the Wrath of Hawk. Poor Billy. Love you to death, Billy, but you deserved that one.
The best part, though, is that Storm knows that they have to get over themselves...because at some point their lives are going to depend on one another, and they need to have each other's backs. And he will do anything and everything to make that happen. No matter how crazy the idea and how much pain he has to inflict. Because they're clan brothers, and personal issues are secondary to the good of the clan.
I love you for this.
| PhantomEmpress 12/27/10 . chapter 2
Titanium shin bones OUCH.
I'm loving this story and can't wait to see it develope further. The relationships that have to be built to make a strong clan certainly will have a rocky beginning.