What the hell! I wanted to read what was Chizuru's reaction!

Arrrggg, stupid Heisuke xDDD

I like your story anyway... although I find it quite short xDDDD

But I like it 3

I kind of feel bad for Sano (he's my next Hakuoki bias :D), but I feel bad for Souji getting the salty tea. Erm, no, I actually feel bad for the ruined tea. Tea is precious, after all. (;A;)

Gah. Damn, Souji's so cute, trying to snatch Chizuru's attention as much and as often as he could. How can a girl say no to such a smart, sexy bastard? Fu fu fu. And.. that's a compliment for Souji, just replace the bastard part with something.. uhm, nicer.

I like the last bit there. Souji, you should've done that sooner. Chizuru totally doesn't mind. ;) Ah, Heisuke makes a great c blocker, I reckon. So, he's the type to understand things after a demonstration, eh? Teehee. Would've loved to read a Shinpachi line or two, but it's okay.

Hello dear, I must say that I like your Souji. :)

Anything that's got Okita in it is awesome, not to mention sexy. ;)

I like how this fic incorporates the fact that Okita's got tuberculosis, but it still manages to come out as light-hearted. Almost all the rest start with the whole sickness thing, then they start to dump heaps of angst to break people's hearts. His interaction with Chizuru is simple and actually easy to understand, and I could sense the little flowers in the background as he teases her. Maa, Chizuru, why are you so adorable? They give off the vibes of being either very good friends, or a couple about to be formed.

Now I'm off to read the next chapter

P.S. Total LOL at Heisuke's c*** block. Nobody ruins Okita's sexy time and lives! (But apparently, Heisuke did. Oh well.)

OMG...it would have been so much more different if you didn't add the second chapter! I love it now XD

Pfffft ha "Quess what I just saw!" that's hysterical I love this story

I really liked this story! I've liked Okita and that he jokes around with Chizuru! So thank you!

FINALLY! Finally an update!

I thought you have forgotten it... BUT Now I'm really happy that you updated it! _

But it's kind of short... and I don't want it to be the end! Can't you write more? Perhaps Hijikata getting jealous? PLEASEE!

God, I hope I'll manage a decent review...being a bad lurker and all that.

Well, it was certainly cute.

Chizuru is quite predictable, isn't she? She reacted exactly as Okita thought she would with his being outside in the cold.

And he was very forward, which is good as it is the only way Chizuru would understand. It is after all quite difficult to understand Okita sometimes, as you don't know when he is serious and when not.

By the way, I think one sentence was a bit awkward. Maybe because it is nearly the same sentence as the one in the previous chapter, I don't know.

"They stayed like for that for a few minutes and until they were interrupted when Hisuke barged into his room. "

compared to

"They stayed like that for a few minutes, until they were interrupted by someone called Chizuru name."

Wait, now I know: It is the "and until" that sounds weird.

Another thing are the names. You have written "Hisuke" instead of "Heisuke" and "Shenpachi" instead of "Shinpachi".

Besides those to small things, everything else is awesome.

I do not know what else there is to say. Perhaps I will surprise you with another review in the future, if I am not too engrossed in another fandom. For now...

bye

ice-phoenix

Awwww loved this chappie! Great work...Hisuke damm youu why must ya 'ave such bad timein'! ;)

:D I love it! please update sooon; keep it going. I can tell it will be a very good one.

Plz pllzz update soon k? So gud Okita san n Chizuru!

man it was really cute..hope u upd8 soon ill b waiting 4 it!3

Heehee_

So sweet!

Hey

Well, I have just read your message and thought 'Why not?', so here I am carrying a nice review with me.

Actually, I am procrastinating at the moment. Writing a review to an awesome story like yours is so much nicer than doing homework.

So here I go:

I think it was quite well written and in character. Poor Okita-san, Chizuru really is the only light he has. Hmm...I should stop wih the pity, Okita-san wouldn't want it. Though Chizuru could give him a nice long hug, then perhaps a kiss...

Ok, that just shows how deprived I am of nice OkitaChizuru fanfics. I mean, Hijikata-san is nice and all that but it gets he bit repetitive after some time, don't you think.

By the way, which year/time is it during this chapter? Just curious...

Chizuru seems a bit torn, doesn't she? Keeping Okita-san company or giving Hijikata-san his tea. Does she have a crush on Hijikata-san? What about her feelings for Okita-san?

Seems like you want to continue this story. Will it be just OkitaChizuru or do you want to bring Hijikata-san into the mix? What about Okita's tuberculosis? Will it end tragic or will you give them a piece of happiness? Will they even get together?

So many questions...what will you do? Hopefully posting your new chapter and be happy about the reviews you are going to get because you amazed you reader with your ingenuity. What do you think. Isn't it a nice aim for you?

Well, I'll see you next chapter

bye

ice-phoenix

Hmph Okita-san, teasing a girl like that isn't nice! You made me worried o3o

Continue it, please? I want to read more Okita-san scene :3

Keep up the good work! ;)