|Reviews for deadly temptation|
| salliejo 12/30/10 . chapter 1
i know this author very very well, i would just like to ask people to judge story on storyline and content at the moment. the author has autistic spectrum disorder/ADHD and struggles with writing. composing stories is her way of escaping from everyday life and we who know her are so very proud of how these stories are developing and are also amazed at the wonderful comments you readers are giving her. we will endeavour to give her extra help with proof reading. the author is overwhelmed by not only the amount of people hitting this story, but the fact that many of you are viewing it on a regular basis. all comments are taken on board and we will look at issues raised. many thanks to you all xxxx
| katicus 12/29/10 . chapter 7
ooooh saucy Reaver! haha, glad we're seeing even more of his personality, the seductive side unleashed! i love how fast you update cuz each chapter just seems to leave me wanting to read more :) keep it up!
| AIG-117 12/29/10 . chapter 7
This story is pure awesomeness :D
| Cloud Raithwall 12/29/10 . chapter 7
AWWWW! I both hate and love where you ended it! GAH! cursed Reaver and his charms. i loved how you ended it with him saying something that was so seductive that it, i dare say, gave me chills. i hate how the chapter ended in the first place. i want more please... Well, back to business, this chapter was really good in giving the prisoner princess a run for her money with being in Reaver's room, although i don't think she wants to be near that bed, if you know what i mean. lol. anywho i just love how this is moving along and i truly cannot wait for more. i know a good story when i read it and this is phenomenal so far. It's utterly addicting. Until next chapter...XD
| katicus 12/28/10 . chapter 6
wow, 2 updates? you certainly don't dissapoint, haha! loved the way you editted the scene from the game because we can see much more of Reaver's attitude in this :)look forward to the next update!
| Cloud Raithwall 12/27/10 . chapter 6
Alright, I wish that there was more to read. I am growing more attatched with every word and now that Reaver is fully in the picture I just want more. This is coming to be a good story. And Reaver being so nonchalant about the entire ordeal, impecable. And the fight scene wasn't that bad, I followed every detail and understood what was going on, no matter how short it was. I can't wait for the next chapter, I hope you have it out soon! :)
| Apathyisdeath 12/27/10 . chapter 2
Ah, I very much love your representation of Ben, too. I'm not usually a massive fan of Princess/Ben (total Elliot fangirl, haha) but this actually made me want to read on, and not to mention the feathers situation was rather adorable.
| Apathyisdeath 12/27/10 . chapter 1
Ooh, this is such a great introduction. It's a great representation of Reaver's character, him being his flamboyant, dramatic self. I look forward to reading more. :D
| Cloud Raithwall 12/25/10 . chapter 4
Well done so far! I like how this is moving along. I really like how well this has stuck to the game. I hope to see Reaver again soon, I just love him, no matter how evil he can be. Can't wait for the next chapter! :D
| Chamst 12/23/10 . chapter 1
Not to be rude, but you need to try to spell check it a little bit more. I do love the story so far, though!
| katicus 12/18/10 . chapter 3
this chapter was like a filler chapter, neccesary and leading up to some proper action! i LOVE this story and never mind about spelling mistakes, everybody makes them and i dont find that it takes me out of the story at all. just keep doing what you're doing and im sure this story will be a hit! :D
| TotalTownie 12/18/10 . chapter 3
Nice one again! I know you're trying your hardest and I 100% believe in you.
I'd like to say that any mistakes in this story are my fault. As the beta reader to this story, it's my job to look at these things and check them.
Again, well done.
| Tabby 12/17/10 . chapter 1
You may wish to brush up on your English skills a little bit. Sentences do not usually start with lower-case letters. In addition, possessions are shown with 's (for example Mom's book. Joe's dog. Tom's Uzi). You have the good bare bones of a story, but there are so many errors that it jolts the reader completely out of it. I am also willing to overlook words that are spelled incorrectly if the misspelling is a real word (for example, if you went to spell cat and spelled it cot) because a spell-check will not pick that up. However, there is no such word as 'enouth'. This tells me that you did not use spell-check at all before posting, and in the age where you can blink and find free word-processing software anywhere there really is no excuse for that. It sends an "I don't care about you" message to your readers. Just food for thought.
| katicus 12/17/10 . chapter 2
oooh, Reaver's on her mind already :P loving the quick update, keep it up!
| TotalTownie 12/17/10 . chapter 2
Aww no problem honey!
You're the girl with the ideas, I'm just the 'overseer-of-work' girl!