Brilliant :)

More more more! This is so good. Please continue writing!

Oh my goodness! Y'all did an amazing job portraying the characters the way they seem on the books. Keep up the good work!

please update! You are an amazing writer!

Out of the Frying Pan. And it's really good. Umm...yeah.

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You used a Lemony Snicket quote in a Mysterious Benedict Society fic. I love you. You...that...gkealjsdnfm. Thank you. On a different note, this is very intriguing story so I shall continue reading. Onward!

Ooh, the plot thickens! I'm so inexpressibly happy you updated. I wish I knew where Kahlan is, but ah well.

One of the things I love about this story is how inconvenient everything is. There is no trail of clues left for them to follow; no kindly man on the train waiting to take them to safety. It feels real, and it feels scary. And it's not the constant threat of Ten Man attack that does that - it's the cold. The big, empty city. The fact that they feel like no one in the world is on their side, and that no one is coming for them. It's beautifully done.

I actually caught more errors than I usually do.

""It'll be good to see the place again," said Sticky, said Sticky..." Er, I think you want to delete on of those.

"Nobody noticed when the /men in black suits/ came." Why is 'men in black suits' italicized? I can sort of see it as emphasis, but I actually think that it sounds better without it. Or it might just be an honest mistake - I know there's been some italics trouble in the other chapters.

Also there was a comma misuse somewhere, but I don't remember where and I can't seem to find it again.

Character-wise its very good. I actually think that Reynie would be doing more with holding the group together than Kate, but I suppose you need Reynie's internal monologue for the story. It's also interesting to see how they all react to such extreme situations.

To prevent spoiling it for others, I sent my response to the riddle via PM.

So in short, I love it! Give me more! FEED ME.

Grammar Defender

P.S. I appreciate the forethought that you must have had to put in the news article about the fire. It was well done - it blended into the background until you called attention to it, and then it was as clear as day. Very nice.

Yellow snow. Still laughing from that. LOL

Wow. This was a good, interesting story. I didn't find their being two authors distracting, you write well together (in my opinion).

I don't expect much, but I liked it. This is a fanfic that actually sounds like a real book.

Please start writing it again!

Wonderful job. This is very well-written and has a very good, original plot. I will definatky be following this story, and I can't wait to read more. Good job.

Nice I like it. Good chapter length.

Alright, if this wasn't a fanfiction, I would've thought that Trenton Lee Stewart wrote this. In a nutshell: Love it!

Okay. This was much less grim than the previous chapter, but still quite excellent.

Kahlan - Very nice hotel idea! Brilliant! Genius! And I believe that I found where the advice column from Screnzy came in - when Kate said, "We need warmth before -get down!" Right?

And now to both of you - Loco Parentis? Crazy Parents? Definition, please? Also, why 'A Hazy Shade of Winter?'

I'm not operating at full mental capacity at the moment, and was therefore not looking too hard for mistakes. I didn't find any.

I do wonder about this line, though - "Yeah, and I'm not staying in a stuffy old museum. Haven't you ever heard? The displays come to life at night!" Constance said, not loudly, but not without force. - What does she mean? One too many viewing of Might in the Museum, or just her being a bit weird.

Again, strange things italicized for no apparent reason. This time it's even more confusing, because it's mixed in with thoughts. In fact, it might be just me misinterpreting things. If you want to find what I mean, it's in the paragraph beginning: Kate set her jaw and tried not to glare at him.

Oh! Actually, I /did/ find a mistake after all! Just below the afore mentioned paragraph, there should be a space between 'of' and 'imminent.'

I think that that's all I have to say. Thanks for this brilliant chapter! I eagerly awaited the sixth!

Grammar Defender

Intense. Update soon!

-DyslexicNerd

Right. I'm back! I had a... field trip, if you will, and had to leave.

Back to the story I'm supposed to be reviewing - Perhaps I missed something or am just being obtuse, but why are seemingly random phrases italicized in the second paragraph? This greatly confused me, and I spent a full five minutes trying in vain to figure it out.

Reynie wakes up to find the time ten o-clock. Shall I assume ten o-clock AM, judging by your later reference to the sun?

Nice use of paragraphs. That's not normally something I bother mentioning, seeing as everything should have good paragraphing, but I mean using paragraphing for punch. Grammatically speaking, it's not the greatest, but visually and for the reader, the way you two use the paragraphs adds a sense of... something. English, why dost thou have such a lousy vocabulary? (And yes, that was me talking to a language.)

After combing through meticulously, I found no spelling or real grammatical errors. Actually, considering who's writing, I'm not at all surprised, though I was a bit disappointed.

And THANK YOU for not falling into the Connie-girl trap of mortal peril! I've noticed that several authors grossly over-use Constance's nick name, having it as the only thing Kate ever calls her. It irks me to no end.

A suggestion not necessarily to th authors, but to the Society - try sleeping in the library. It worked for Constance. Why not?

I look forward to the next installment of this charming and pleasant (again, sarcasm) story. Thanks.

Grammar Defender