It isn't that bad.

But it's far too much information crammed in about four chapters. I got most of the plot by glancing over it.

And despite the story being AU the characters are really OOC. Harry having inherited a lot of money and grown up without a family wouldn't have given away a child. And Ginny would've had all of her family's help raising twins.

For the next time(s) try to get into the characters minds. And don't try to make the story short although the plot isn't. It makes it seem unreal.

An interesting story, that's for sure! Very AU, especially if Harry would be taking the Potions job at Hogwarts! Are Ron & Hermione (correct spelling) acting like the Dursleys? Why would friends of Harry's treat their daughter like that, though? Also, some places you have 'must of' (or something similar); but this should be 'must have' instead. I'm wondering what's happened to James, and if that was indeed a raggedy-looking Harry & Ginny who spoke with Tella after the ceremony, then where are they now? Just curious! Thanks for writing!

Great Job Stina! Keep it up.