Hey this story is awesome and please update soon. I want to learn more about jack's past. Also at first you said he was 11 and disappeared for 13 years. Now your saying he was 13 and gone for 20 years. I'm confused. Please PM me and explain all this. Please update soon.

Dear tyfi:

In the rhyme, I think the last word you're looking for is "délivrerait", not "délivrer as". (Which means, of course, that it doesn't rhyme anymore, so I guess you're back to square one.) Also, it's "pawn", not "pon".

Sincerely,

Qoheleth

wow, please continue!

Ok I love Harry Potter and don't worry I can wait ;)

This is really good! Please continue soon!