OMG those poor kids! LMAO! I won't even comment on how traumatisingly gross it is for me to imagine even hearing a peep out of my parents so I can't imagine what the poor kids must have gone through, but LOL! Oh, and hot damn! Kinky is right, I LOVE it! XD

Hot Smut!

P.S-Whos Shouta?

Wow; this story made me cry tiny little tears at the end. It was a cute story! :)

I love it. Great job.

...WOW! Okay, that was seriously hot! Two sexy guys acting on their equally strange and sexy kinks... with their kids sitting right there in the next room! I wonder how i'm not in the hopital yet, or unconcious... Maybe i'm used to it? Oh anyways, this was hot and i love the ending! But i hope that it doesn't come true in the end 'cause i'm gonna seriously turn on the water works :(

And shouldn't Raiden and Aimi know better? I mean... For God's sake its Naruto and Sasuke! Of course they'll be trying to screw each other's brains out whenever they get the chance to xD

Damn, this is hot :3

Ookay, that was kinda hot and all, but SO CRINGEWORTHY! I couldn't help but to put myself in their kids' shoes and imagine what they'd be feeing with their parents fucking while they were around, and feel extremely sick D: Poor, poor children! If it was exihibitionisnm with anybody else around though, it would be totally amazing. JUST not with the kids :P

very sexy

and very well written

great job!

That's epic :p

LOVE your OCs. They're precious :D

Those poor scarred kids

... Such language!

Their kids are right there!

Why are you such a good smut writer? No...seriously.

I think that you have effectively ruined me from slash...at least from other authors... Even in different fandoms! And that's just not bloody fair!

I mean, maybe it's not their fault that their 'explicit' scenes last a good four paragraphs at most. Perhaps they cannot be faulted of their ignorance regarding the fact that silent sex is boring sex. Maybe I can't blame them that their character is reduced to the SAME SODDING WORDS during the act. And it could be possible that everything they wrote came from a shoddy porn from the eighties.

And of course I could go on and on, but for the sake of sanity, I shall abstain. But truly miss, it isn't fair. And perhaps you just happen to hit on all my kinks. I love a top!Protagonist preferably whose bottoming counter-part is their rival in cannon. I love a slutty bottom and a domineering top (as I am both myself) Though as I fear this rant is a bit personal, I hope that you can find something redeeming in it.

Though, perhaps I should amend my first sentence. And remove the word smut from the equation. I've read your other works (I've been a silent lurker ever since the first chapter of Bond) and even though your writing style has changed dramatically, I still find myself wanting to read it all over again.

Thanks for taking the time to share what ever proclivities your mind deems perverse enough to poison society with (and I do mean that in the good way-some authors cannot tell a joke in print, and I do not want this monstrous review to be taken in the wrong way)

You are a valued artist,

Lemony

I like it :3

Damn, that was some hot sex! And it got into some obsessive love in the end! Great stuff!

OH . MY . GOD .

THIS STORY .

OH GOD.

IT WAS SO HOT.

I WAD TO STOP, TAKE A BREATHER, AND THEN READ SOME MORE.

OH MY GOD.

I LOVED IT.

I JUST .. OH GOD.

Please update this story soon , I can't bear to not read any more T_T

/ This review was brought to you by caps lock . My excitement was just too much to bear xD