|Reviews for Destiny Cafe|
| Guest 4/20/13 . chapter 18
One: Quit apoligizing for how crappy you think your story is. I have thoroughly enjoyied so far. Two: I what order do the couples finaly admit their feelings? The suspence is killing me! Three: Will the Heartless wars pick back up with the Destiny Cafe crew fighting in it? That is what it seems to lead up to.
| Blint 4/20/13 . chapter 18
While I found this chapter entertaining I also felt like it didn't quite grab my attention quite as much as the last two chapters did.
Overall a decent chapter, and I look forward to seeing what direction you take with Namine and Roxas. Keep up the great work!
| xXellesmeraXx 3/23/13 . chapter 18
No problem! Excited for next update!
| MonMonCandie 3/21/13 . chapter 2
LOL I've only begun to read this and already I find it so amusing. XD
I rarely read SoKai fics, so this was a pleasant surprise to read and I absolutely love how structured you are! :) The personalities of the characters so far from what I've read in the first two chapters mesh really well. I love how you've kept that goofy, almost naive, side of Sora's personality and Riku is just AMAZING. XD Can't say that's very helpful considering I'm already a Riku fangirl, but I'm being honest when I say I love how you characterized him. He can be so funny when he's teasing Sora, but you know that the guy loves him like the best friend he should. I found Kairi so far to be adorable; especially when she's shy. It makes me wanna give her a big hug. :3 I can't wait to see how the story unfolds when I get to the later chapters.
Now, for a chapter specific review: the second chapter was GOLD. I especially loved the snowball war part. Definitely reminded me of good times with my own friends and you wrote some party witty banter. The one between Cloud and Leon was my favorite; it reminded me of that one scene in KH2 when they were back to back. XD Excuse me as I fangirl... LOL I should also note that I love how Sora and the others were getting really into acting out the snowball war. Riku and Zack when they were 'down' really made me laugh. Just...their 'last words' and actions before going out of commission made me smile. I really shouldn't be because I was at work too. LOL Normally, when you can get that kind of reaction out of me when I'm at work, you're doing good. :D
Haha, you have an amusing story so far, and like I said before, I can't wait to get into the later chapters. Just a bit of a suggestion that you can probably use for future chapters/stories: I understand that the stuttering in the dialogue is supposed to indicate extreme nervousness or embarrassment, but technically, you don't have to use it all the time for almost ever second word. Below is an example:
What was written: "It-It's o-ok. B-besides, I-I owe you a k-kiss too." He pulled her a bit out of the embrace and kissed her cheek. "Y-you know, f-for the mistletoe..."
What might be better: "I-It's ok. Besides, uh, I owe you a...a kiss too." He pulled her a bit out of the embrace and kissed her cheek while suppressing the urge to turn as red as Kairi's hair. "You know...for the mistletoe..."
Actions and dialogue tags are a good indicator for the reader to know how a line of dialogue will be said by the character and how a character feels at that moment. :) I'm not saying you AREN'T allowed to use the stutter thing ever, but I think it's best to limit your use of actually showing it. Also, it's okay to repeat a constant once ("d-date" instead of "d-d-d-date") for the stutter word. It gets the point across that a character is nervous and, IMO, too much of the repeating constant breaks the flow of your story (and on the rare occasion, some people may think the character speaking has a stuttering problem).
Again, I'm really excited to read the rest of the story! Keep up the great job!
| psychicshipping 3/21/13 . chapter 18
If only we had more paint wars...
| KHLegacy 3/21/13 . chapter 18
You're welcome keep up the good work this was funny Sora needs tobe careful of how he brags
| Harmonious Wolf 3/20/13 . chapter 18
D'Awwwee! Nami she's coming out of her shell!
| Gohan Roxas 3/20/13 . chapter 18
I missed the roots of this fic... To be perfectly honest, the AU felt really out of place here. Maybe if you did another fic with that storyline it'd work, but here, not so much.
| snoogenz 2/8/13 . chapter 17
Ahh I see what you did there. After a re-read of chap 16 I found the choice difference. I dare say it would be possible that you could make a side story to destiny cafe. That is of course you have the time to write it all.
| Blint 2/7/13 . chapter 17
Wow. Have to admit, I'm almost disappointed that you didn't go this route for the story (almost). Any chance that we'll be seeing more of this (or any) alternate universe glimpse or maybe even a new story based off of this idea?
| Peppamince 2/7/13 . chapter 17
Good chapter. Not much else to say on this one. I liked it, it conveyed how much can be changed by a single different decision. Thanks for writing it.
| KHLegacy 2/7/13 . chapter 17
Sora should've done what he was told good chapter I wonder what the other glimpses will be or will you continue with this one?
| Blint 2/6/13 . chapter 16
Well done man. It was a good choice having Sora's experience with the war be focused around his father. I'd been wondering how you would handle his parents in this universe. I do feel that the ending to this chapter was slightly abrupt, but it seems to work well in this chapter. It's not exactly a cliff hanger, but more like a nice little pause on the story before it picks up again. Just try not to leave the pause going for too long yeah? Look forward to your next chapter, keep up the great work!
| Stargazer 225 2/3/13 . chapter 16
I almost gave up the fact that you'll ever update this again. It's not that bad but it's not as fluffy as it was in the previous chapters. Good to know you're still alive
| El Cuentacuentos 2/2/13 . chapter 16
The story is going great so far, and this chapter, even if it was a short one, ended just at the rigth moment. Im looking foward the next one!