|Reviews for The Gambit|
| summerful21 8/21/11 . chapter 1
Oooh... Interesting! I like your writing style... Please update it!
| waterblossemangel13 3/15/11 . chapter 1
Behold! A update soon please?
| FooGriffy 2/6/11 . chapter 1
I understand that it takes forever to get a single story chapter done and perfected... but seriously! Hurry up!
I kind of write fast, for my fans, then edit my stories later to make them perfect. Then I repost them.
| Kitsune Heart 1/6/11 . chapter 1
I am no longer ill, so I review!
"each body language she could show": seems like "facet of" should be put in there.
Romance and sig: Oh, dear, I can just see it...
Interesting beginning. Needs another edit, though. Still, looking forward to seeing where this is going.
...the idea just hit me of Butler going where all the missing socks go, but that's just insanity.
| Ann Incorporated 12/31/10 . chapter 1
/Wow./ That's a very interesting cliff hanger, there. One thing though: I think he would be more paranoid than to just put on a shirt that is unordinary coming from Angeline.
I expect (beg, plead, cajole, etc.) you to update as soon as you can. Also, happy new year!
| HeadlessHoncho 12/30/10 . chapter 1
well, It was good, but it kept making me go... okay... uh... wtf... thats confusing... wtf... thats a plot twist, a great many questions, a great many left unanswered.
| Ru-Doragon 12/29/10 . chapter 1
-bops Day gently on the head- You should read it Day. Tis good. -smiles- You know I like this xy. -hums- Update soon. _
| FooGriffy 12/29/10 . chapter 1
Okay, I'm only slightly confused. That's a good thing, I think.
As for constructive critisizm... How the Hybras would I do that? This is amazing, and it doesn't need to be improved. I saw a few grammar mistakes, but I doubt that would help you much.
| Incendiarist 12/28/10 . chapter 1
...Xy, you are fricking brilliant.
But what's this about calling Mrs. Kelp "mummy"? I didn't think a single date could go quite /that/ far.
And Artemis wasn't counting his words. It was rather obvious, really. Did you forget, or is it actually for the plot?
| Forever Day 12/28/10 . chapter 1
Okay. Review time. Before the actual what I thought there was 'heat-to-heart talk' where I think you meant 'heaRt-to-heart', but other than that, the spelling/grammar seems fine.
The storyline, though, isn't really my cup of tea: a little unlikely with Butler, and Mulch's arrest seems too likely (in the way that if anyone was facing a charge, murder or no, Mulch would be the person I'd immediately expect it to be)
There were some funny moments, but I was kind of dissapointed in the way that Artemis and Holly's talk didn't actually get anywhere. I did like Trouble's mom (she was exactly how I'd always imagined she'd act around Holly) and I'll be interested to see how it all works out. That pretty much goes for the whole story, at this moment not I'm totally won over, but I want to see where it goes.
| WolfButler 12/28/10 . chapter 1
Yeah this is alright.
Pretty good actually...
Hmm... I'll probably keep an eye on this...
WAIT WHAT THE HELL?
my reaction to the last paragraph.
I won't spoil it for everyone but seriously dude? WTH?
I had to check it wasn't a parody for a sec :P
Seriously, it's great apart from the weird cliffie... what a way to (temporarily I hope) get rid of the big guy...
I hope you have a genius plan all worked out for this because that is quite honestly the weirdest thing to happen in this well-written a story.
Watching out for it for now,