Yay! Really long chapter. It was pretty good, and I can't wait to find out what happens next. Update soon!

The wait was worth it. this was really good

Hahahaha the ending was so funny

Yay, you updated! Awesome story, update again soon

This was a really good chapter. update soon

Another great chapter. i'm having trouble with that error message as well and its really getting on my nerves. This was a great chapter. I loved seeing Susan and Caspian arguing with each other. Poor Mel, but this was good

I can't believe you thought about discontinuing this! It's too good, but i'm glad you didn't. A telmarine? that was a GREAT plot twist. can't wait to see what your ideas are

Wow, how'd i miss this update? That was good. can't wait to see what happens next

Is the pendant the Lyonis pearl? i love this story. I'm glad you decided not to discontinue it. I can't wait to see what your other idea is!

Yay, she's been rescued. Great job with this. I want to know what the Lyonis pearl is!

Wow, that was so intense. Update again soon. i loved the ending

Awesome. I love Mel. I'm glad she was rescued

I'm glad you decided not to discontinue this. I'm still loving the story so much. Update soon

Great chapter. I'm off to read the next one!

Yay, i'm glad you decided not to give up on this. That was a great twist. i can't believe a Telmarine killed her parents. Great job with this and update again soon. I can't wait to see what you have up your sleeve for next time. I loved the last line so much. Update