This is good but sad story... I like it. Update!

Cool story!

Wooow good story. Please continue it. :)

Can't wait to read more of this great story!

Update Soon!

awwwww pooor yami

This was okay...I guess. But I don't like the constant spelling mistakes and the poor characterisation!

Not good...Poor spelling and poor characterisation. What a mess.

This is sooo stipid! X ! The plot is slow and non exsistant, your writing skills are some of the worst I've eva seen! You can't spell and your grammar is all over the place.

...and your characters are really ooc (out of character). You're trying too hard to have the characters be what you assume they would be. You're attempts are pathetic and easily seen through.

Frankly, this is one of the worst fanfics I've eva read!

omg! its been updated :3 YAY! and great chapter XD

yay! an update! wow,yamis past is so sad! but at least he is happy now,and he can help yugi be happy.i wonder if yugi is pregnant from heba...beautiful chapter! loved it!

Great story!

I like this story ) I hope you update again, and hopefully soon :)

aw. -glomps yugi-dnt cry! damn heba!how could he!i hope he doesnt find yugi at yamis place,if he does,yami must beat the shit outta him!at least yami knows now and can help yugi get through it

haha i like the mum :)

Aah another fantastic chapter.

Your writing has definately improved lately and I love the subtleties that you employ; telling Yami with the ring - brilliant. It brings such a realism to the character and I like Yami's gentle manner, it really rings true to a person who knows, at least in part, what Yugi's going through and really endears us to the Yami's situation as much as Yugi's.

I can't wait to see where this story will turn next, for the life of me I couldn't predict it, but that doesn't stop my mind from buzzing. I love the constant reminders of Heba's lurking presence, right there on the edge waiting to strike. I can't wait until I see where thats going to come to a head.

Keep up the good work

- Phoenix