|Reviews for PMD Legends of Amaria: Formation of Team Fireheart|
| arianna 7/16/12 . chapter 14
slightly confused towards the end but probably the best chapter so far :]
| arianna 7/16/12 . chapter 11
i felt like every thing just went by so quick in this chapter... not bad though it isn't my favorite
| arianna 7/14/12 . chapter 10
loved this chopter, cant wait to finish this
| arianna 7/14/12 . chapter 7
one of my favorite chapters so far
| arianna 7/14/12 . chapter 6
so confusing... and depressing but it's pretty good so far
| The Pen Vs The Sword 4/23/12 . chapter 3
Again, you need to watch the punctuations.
Sword: You did better this time!
Pen: But the problem persists.
And it might be better to just combine the action in the dungeon together instead of separating it by floors like you did. Just say "They found nothing on the second floor and moved on" or something similar.
Also, you sometimes switched between past and present tense in your sentences. You need to be careful of those.
That said, the prologue was good and this chapter is a better improvement from the first.
| justine 9/25/11 . chapter 10
cool alex am get in to it
| justine 9/18/11 . chapter 9
cool dud am starting to get into it
| justine 9/16/11 . chapter 8
it cool alex am not into it their let
| Something dictionary related 1/14/11 . chapter 1
Isn't this a rewrite?