Omg I sure remember this scene! Kris is driving like a kamikaze for Gods sake! And messing with the leather bikers? Nuh uh not good Kris! Shes really desperate to get in there it seems! Good job on Kris POV La

Aaah Charlie is always cool...but doesnt he as well feel a bit uneasy and worried with Kris going all commando? He is always cool...and it drives me mad sometimes... Hmm poor Bri wont cut herself any slack it seems! Being beaten up in a hospital isnt enoug, she now has the nightmares adding up to that. Bosley...ugh does everything he can. I like how you have given each character life in their own way...without neglecting any of them. Your work must have cocted a lot of time and research because I see a lot of effort here. The plot is very realistic as well.

I suddenly realised I really really dont like brother Marcus...! Kris is planning something my guess is...and this something Kelly wont like. Bri...wth? Why cant she let herself relax a bit instead of worrying her head off?

Heh Kris running out of the church! Tch! Truth is...only time I remember them in religious environment (apart from the crazies in the basement who wanted Kris' hair) was when Kelly was shot...so i take it these angels are not very religious! Ah well Finally Kelly is out of the hell hole..but is the surface better...or worse? Good work La

Whoa did Marcus just toss Kelly in the Alice in Wonderland hole? Ow! Tch tch Kris with the poddle and Bosley on heels...a hilarious scene for sure from our dear author! Question is...can they get the info they need in time?

I got one word...as long as Bri is concerned. : OUCH!
B) brother Marcus is a weirdo. Kelly is locked there with a bunch of more weirdoes...and head weirdo is Marcus
Poor Kris trying to hold onto something...doing some detective work here
And...I really cracked up on Charlie watching them via secret cameras and the Nothing Actually Happened headline ahahah good humour here!

Who knew Kelly would be disgusted by feet?! And I like the little mentions to previous cases! Oh Tulips! Hmm aaaw Kris talking to Bri...saying what she couldnt say when she was awake...mmmm I wonder how Kelly will cope with the religious cult there...

Aaargh av just added "being drugged and thrown into a cults headquarters" on the top of my fears lists! Poor Kris blames herself...glad Bosley is there for her...I also like how you describe Kelly trying to get rid of her panic attack...very realistic work!

Omg now I remember! I totally loved the lil moment between Bri n Kris back there...Bri being protective big sister mode hehe! And poor Kris...tch just lost her home...darn it! Kris was very lucky she didnt stumble upon the dudes that beat Sabrina up...as for Bri...naaaaasty work! Hope Charlie pays them enough

Well well well I havent read this fic in quite a while and it surely deserves my attention...I really like how you have portrayed miss Limardo...trying to hide her feelings...And I really really dont wanna get Bri mad at me heh! Chosen of the Lord...! Hmmm!

Delicious, all I can say. Poor Sabrina.

I don't like this particular story, and I don't agree with heavily religious toned stories. the pacing is very spastic and almost reminds me of a 1920's silent film. since you wanted 'helpful and constructive' because you couldn't stand the thought of someone not liking your story, there you have it.

"what in the hell is this i mean what in the holy hell"

Casper:

Do please take the time to expand on your apparent unease with this fanfic. I surely would like to know what on earth made you decide to leave this pointless and quite non-constructive and unhelpful comment.

If you were so bored why did you leave a comment at all?

If you can't say anything constructive or helpful, or even imaginative, then...naff off and don't say owt at all.

what in the hell is this i mean what in the holy hell

Great story. Always nice to see Jill be so caring to her little sister! Even under the influence Kris did try her best to protect Kelly.