|Reviews for Chronicles of Le Monde|
| XoreandoX 5/23/11 . chapter 15
A nice view into how Takato is adapting to his new environment, however there are two bits of incorrect words used from first look.
"I think your mother just wants you to look nice, maybe she sees yourself in her." I think you meant to say that she sees a bit of herself in you
"He's business partners say that the Nijeris are becoming more restless and have even raided frontier towns and trading posts."
I believe it was suppose to be His business partners. He's is "he is"
Besides that it has been an interesting update and look forward to seeing how this story will progress in terms of Taichi's development as the new Governor.
| chm01 5/23/11 . chapter 15
hey can you do something about tai's lack of etiquette? like ahving Mimi teach him or something like that.
| Vigatus 5/9/11 . chapter 14
Thanks for updating. It cheered me up to see that your story continues after having such a crappy day today. I do wish the chapters where longer but seeing how I have not updated any of my stories in over a year I can't complain too mush now can I? I am looking forward to seeing how this unfolds and I can see Mimi's and Tai's relationship starting a war (a little like the Iliad) and bringing Tai into the Empire's camp. However I can also see Tai resisting that in order to protect his adopted family in Royal.
| terracannon876 5/9/11 . chapter 14
Hahah, if Mimi gives Davis a run for his money, I can't imagine what Ruki would do to him XD At least Catherine might be better for him...
It's good that Taichi is getting respect. It's surprising no one thinks to ask him how he got to be a sudden upstart lord, seeing as how no one had heard of him before the war... and that may explain why he knew nothing of lordship (well, that plus the world he isn't from this world XD).
Thanks for updating )
| Falkoren 5/3/11 . chapter 13
I have noticed the chapters have become exceptionally short. It's a little disappointing.
If I may make a suggestion? There are many things I think you can elaborate on. In fact a full 38 days at sea passed without any sort of description. There's much that could have happened that hasn't. Another example would be if you would have described lady L'Alsace and Taichi's first night together. I'm sure he would have tried to play the gentleman and not even sleep on the bed altogether until he was pressured into it. Perhaps even the crew's suspicions regarding his "wife". It is difficult afterall to make a perfect cover up when one is trying to avoid getting too close.
A full week passed prior to Taichi's shipping out without any events. Then the engagement dinner of his sister was ripe for dialogue.
That said though, I do think you leave a strong foundation should you find a "ghost writer." There's is much that can happen with the "key events" that you write your story of. it simply lacks a bit of fluff, for lack of better word.
Hope to read more. :3
| Green-Chrystall 5/2/11 . chapter 13
Haha, I would say that you have your own style. Though from your theme of story I would prefer longer chapter, these 1k words is kinda enjoyable for me :)
Well.. It's faster to read and easy to understand. Plus you also a fast updater (lately) XD
Keep up your work!
| Vigatus 5/2/11 . chapter 13
I disagree with your author's note. While I would like to read a longer chapter, I think your writing is great. Your story has actually gotten me thinking about writing again. I find it very interesting and having studies history in school I actually get most if not all the references your are making/creating.
One thing I think I would like to see would be what the other digi-destined from Tai's home universe are doing. I think is would be god to see if they are trying to find a way to locate Tai. It would be fun to look at the reactions of the digi-destined meeting their dopplegangers, especially through Tai's view point.
I think that we also have to find out about the mysterious force that pulled Tai in to le Monde in the first place. I am sure that can be an interesting story arc. Mind you these two points will have to wait until after the Tusk Wars.
Keep up the good work and thank you for updating.
| sunwraith 5/2/11 . chapter 13
Great chapter. If you giveme permission ill take it up, of course it'll be drastically different but id like you to at least go over it when i write the first chapter or so
| terracannon876 5/2/11 . chapter 13
...Wow, are you asking someone to copy your story? XDDD I'd take it up if I had time... I've always been raring for a Digimon fic, and while Taichi x Mimi isn't my favorite pairing (since Mimi isn't my favorite character), it's not so bad here. I do like your ideas, and even though your writing isn't perfect, it's certainly readable and grammar-correct and technically correct. ie, there's nothing about it that would make ppl go nuuuuuu can't read anymore
...That was a compliment, hope you don't take it the wrong way _
Anyways, I like how Hikari's letter just directly juxtapositions Taichi's little confession. Pff, too late, little sister.
Thanks for the chapter )
| XoreandoX 5/2/11 . chapter 13
I'm slightly confused here, I thought Takato was on the boat with Taichi, meaning they were still travelling, how could Takato know anything about Ruki considering they are across the waters? Either way with that out of the way, I wanted to comment on Taichi's resourcefulness in regards to cooking a meal without any use of modern technology and I certainly hope Taichi doesn't continue to delude himself into thinking that when he makes the decision to leave, it'll be just Mimi who will be heartbroken. So until you update again, may you continue to develop new ideas and help carry your story to your desired end.
| dsgundam00 5/2/11 . chapter 13
nice chapter, will Tai ever go home?
| chm01 5/2/11 . chapter 13
this si interesting
| terracannon876 4/27/11 . chapter 12
I will admit, sometimes this story is hard to read because of all the new places, and keeping the person straight with their title, but all in all, I really enjoyed this story. It's very original and the premise is good.
Can't wait to read more! )
| XoreandoX 4/26/11 . chapter 12
Hm, is this a foreshadowing for a possibility of Taichi learning how to Digivolve Agumon without the Digivice? At least in the event that either Koushiro or Davis would take his when he least expects it. I certainly look forward to seeing how you continue to take this story and hope to see more soon.
| Vigatus 4/25/11 . chapter 12
Your story is quite creative and interesting. I am glad I finally decided to read it. I hope you continue your tale soon.