Wow this was quite a little hidden gem of a story. You captured Genesis' anguish well with the possibility that Sephiroth would die and Angeal was very much so in character.

well, hello, there, hidden gem of a story!

This surely is one of my favourites!THANK YOU! Keep on writing!

Very nicely done! Genesis is crazy and passionate. I think Sephiroth did tend to be protective before Nibelhiem, so your story gels well with my understanding of these characters. I liked how you wrote it with the scene changes slowly revealing everything.

The best story about friendship!Deeply touching...I 've read it over and over again! Thank You!

oh, dear.. This fic totally epic with beautiful ending! :' you totally won! Awesome! :)

This was abselutly wonderful! I love it!

Gen and Seph have a realy complycated but sweet and strong relationship.

Pleace wright a sequell. I want more.

beautiful story i found myself unable to stop reading at any point.

I like it just the way it was I love the suspense that you created, that and the heart wrenching effect it gives you when the unthinkable happens. The feelings that blossomed and how you wrote them were just outstanding and I loved it!

I'm not quite sure what to say...but we'll go with THAT WAS AMAZING!

This story is writen beautifully and I know some people don't like wordieness, but I for one enjoy it, esspecially with your descriptions! Characterisation 10/10! Plot 10/10! And very few if none at all spelling/typo errors.

I like this story as it is, I think if you put it as capters the tension might be lost a little. Having it like this allows you to read consistently and keeps the reader hooked. i think a break would jepordise the flow of it.

I thorurly enjoyed this story and I admit I cryed when poor Genesis was lost in such frustration. Again beautifully written!

Whatta' heart felt story!

I love the flow of the story, the writing was excellent! :)

Genesis' character was so well contrived and conceived, from his arrogant nature, to the portrayal of his anger, emotions and sense of revenge, along with how he addressed everyone in the story was very authentic, and I appreciate that.

Sephiroth and Angeal were also good and in character. One thing I saw about Seph in reading this story, Sephiroth has a humble side to him. Though he is definitely has his big, all mighty ego too, but his mannerisms, calmness, and cool-calm-collectedness are all virtues of humility, quite unlike Genesis.

I really felt for Sephiroth when he was shot, and Genesis when upset and tried aiding his friend by that whole ordeal.

One issue I had with this story, it was a bit too wordy, making the length of this fic unnecessarily long.

Other than that, great story, a new fav for me!

GNXmike

Holy moly! Where in the hell did you pluck this from? Where did you learn to write like this? I was a bit iffy at first about reading this, what with SEPHIROTH being shot and all, but don't judge a book by its cover, so I check it out & find this! You've done a fabulous job here- and I think you have a firm grasp of all 3 friends' characters. I love this, it's so tense and dramatic and sheds light on the fact that the greatest gift you can have in the world is friendship. I'll be honest, I wasn't expecting Sephiroth to get shot so many times, I nearly cried at the thought he REALLY COULD die within the next sentence. The only... stickler I had is the delay time for Genesis to react, being a SOLDIER 1st and all, but at the same time I totally get that Genesis would be like "Holy f**k, Sephiroth's just been shot! SEPHIROTH! How the hell is that possible? He CAN'T die- he's Sephiroth Godsdammit!" All in all I adore this fic, and don't worry about the length, "quality, not quantity" and all. Fabulous & fantastic!

This story made me want to cry. It's so emotional and deep and just... I was hanging on every word as I read it. Poor Genesis-Poor Sephiroth! I agree with Genesis. That idiot! But it's such a sweet thing to read things that delve into that relationship. Thank you so much for writing this, it's a masterpiece.

Epic. Oneshot. I really enjoyed this, you absolutely had me on the edge of my seat. I loved Genesis' emotional stages in dealing with the possibility of death and Angeal's characterization also really struck me as very believable.

-Vashagud.

I love this story! Such a simple plot of Sephiroth getting shot, yet you write him and especially Genesis so well.

As for your question: I’ve seen one-shots two or three times as long so I don’t find the length particularly problematic. Frankly I don’t see where you’d split this into chapters, which are supposed to have a semblance of a beginning, middle and end (even if the end leads into the next chapter) and this feels like a short-story rather than a chaptered novella.

Flashbacks are often confusing so I’m glad you used a steady pattern to alleviate that. It also helps to build the tension in this story—and what tension! Every scene was full of it and you hold that tension until the very last scene which was wrapped up nicely.

The past and present switching is also nice because it sets up two subplots and weaves them together into one when the story is set wholly in the present.

Genesis is captured very well in this story, and I love how this tragedy drastically shakes him out of his former (and petty) opinions and forces him to see what really matters. It's a cliche plotline to do but since you write Genesis so well and it hardly matters. The only place that he slips out of character is when Sephiroth actually gets shot. It was a bit of a stretch for me to believe that he (as a 1st Class SOLDIER) would wait so long before attacking after his partner is shot. On the other hand Sephiroth's fall, and masamune's fall with him was the most vivid and heart-wrenching scene of the story! And when I read the summary of this and thought about Sephiroth getting shot I was thinking one bullet in the right place, or maybe two or three so you really blew away my expectations for that scene.

I also love Genesis' revenge. Despite the flames and fury your portrayal of it was chilling! The aftermath was just as good, with Genesis only reaching solace once Sephiroth wakes up. That really showed the change in Genesis as a character.

Hope to see more from you :D