| Reviews for Mission: 2110: Early Years |
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hecticlife 2/20/11 . chapter 2Intriguing - looking forward to Chapter 3 - what does the dream mean? |
Oddments and Tweaks 2/17/11 . chapter 2Ooh! lots going on here! The dream sequence was great, nice bit of backstory and Caleb not getting the idea of a card game was really in character! I like the way you've got Karin and Caleb starting to clearly contrast-Caleb with his mission drive and enthusiastic naeivety against Karin's hard borne experience! Looking forward to chapter 3! :D |
hecticlife 2/9/11 . chapter 1Well done BeckyTide I enjoyed reading this story. Hope that you continue and we see how your story develops |
Oddments and Tweaks 1/11/11 . chapter 1This is an interesting start, I like how you've set up the characters, and the hints you've sprinkled. It'll be intriguing to see how Caleb reacts around multiple adults for a change! My only thought is a tiny nit-pick, you could loosen the language a little with some abbreviations e.g, a few 'didn'ts' instead of 'did nots'-they sound a little formal-but if that's what you were going for then ignore me! Looking forward to chapter 2! :) |