|Reviews for Face|
| Mystery Girl 911 12/31/12 . chapter 10
I love this story! On chapter 9 when you wrote 'My Fez' I screamed Caroline! It was so obvious! I was trying to piece all the clues together in my mind and came up with a buck of different characters but none of them were that insane.
I love the mystery too it and it's such great description, it keeps me on edge! Keep up the good work! Can't wait for more!
| MistyMountainHop 12/24/12 . chapter 10
Angie, I loved how you wrote Caroline in this chapter. I really heard her voice and saw her nutto face. *lol* and Kelso was soooo close. I enjoyed his scene with her. It flowed well, and her jokes at his expense gave me a laugh, especially:
"Paralyzed, actually." Caroline chirped, wearing a pout on red painted lips. "From the looks of it, the waist down. How ironic."
Another well-done chapter. I have no idea how Fez is going to get out of this story alive. And even if he does, how is he going to cope with the death of all his friends? I'm invested.
| Lady X on the radio 12/23/12 . chapter 10
So good, this is such a addicting read! :D
| Marla's Lost 12/23/12 . chapter 10
I like that Caroline maintained her crazy sense of humor:... "Why are you here?"
"Why are you here?" She repeated his question. Kelso gritted his teeth and unclenched his fist. "For fun, of course!"
"Oh, so stabbing people and cutting out their insides before hanging them is fun to you?"
"More or less, it depends on my outlook of the day. Tomorrow I may start with a bubble bath, ooh or maybe cookies. Haven't decided yet." **** vote for the bubble bath actually!
***This was a great scene: ... Only he couldn't move; he was stuck.
"Paralyzed, actually." Caroline chirped, wearing a pout on red painted lips. "From the looks of it, the waist down. How ironic." ****Could she just have given him some high blood pressure medication? Works the same - ha ha - just kidding Really great chapter
| RevertedLogic 12/23/12 . chapter 10
Great story! I love it!
| Disappointed 12/18/12 . chapter 9
Let's face it your not gonna finish this story or your other ones either. You say you will you say you'll do other things to which I'm sure you'll never do either. Stop lying to your readers and to yourself. It was fine while it lasted but the chance of seeing any updates from you is slim. I've given up
| nannygirl 11/25/12 . chapter 9
Okay first of all I want to say….I KNEW IT!I Knew that person was the killer! I mean I did think that it could be some other people too but my mind was always telling me it was this person but I just didn’t know if it would be because it might be too obvious but this person was the killer and I think they were the perfect choice!
As soon as I read the first line ‘My Fez’ I knew it was her. A very chilling opening and the creepiness did not ease any even though the identity was now known.
Great opening with Fez waking up and the descriptions of what he was feeling—all good stuff. The little bit about Laurie made my LF heart very happy, though I’m curious about why she’s his soon to be girlfriend and yet they’re already living together? Well it is Laurie, I suppose. Poor guy though when he was searching fro his friends, you could really feel his confusion and how scared he was, being alone in a creepy house like that who wouldn’t be?
Okay Fez finding Bud has me a bit confused. At first I thought he didn’t recognize the figure and maybe it was Hyde but he was close enough to tell if it was Bud or not and he saw that it was Bud. AND Caroline said ‘Bud’ in the last chapter—capital letter and all. So I’m wondering now what if Caroline didn’t kill the gang and instead killed…I don’t know people who they didn’t like or their family members and she’s got the gang hidden somewhere in the house. Hmm…
Really fabulous work on the part where it was at last shown who the killer was! Bravo on writing that big moment of the story! Fez’s reaction was perfect! And Caroline was just as creepy and crazy as ever! Oh but poor Fez, I really felt for the guy wanting so desperately to know where his friends were and I’m sure no matter what happens he’ll partly blame himself for all of this since Caroline was after him. Her ‘getting rid’ of his friends because they took him away from her was SO Crazy Caroline! Fez’s outburst was terrifically done! You can imagine it all and still feel a mix of being choked up and frightened too. His friends are his family and he’s really thinking the worse has happened. I like seeing this braver Fez and Caroline calling it cute before putting a sack over his head…only Crazy Caroline lol
Chillingly scary details that started off the next section but so wonderfully written. Caroline bringing Fez to see Kelso first was very sad, Kelso was his best friend and seeing him like that must have hurt. His reaction was terrifically done, very emotional and powerful. Fez sees that its’ Kelso so did Caroline really kill the gang AND Bud or did she just kill Kelso and that’s why she showed Fez him OR is it not Kelso at all. Maybe someone who looks like Kelso. Another Wax figure or Casey Kelso? Or maybe Caroline is a witch like Kelso said earlier about Witches living in the house and she did some type of spell or something I don’t know!
A very powerful and suspenseful ending! Could picture it all! You really have Caroline's voice nailed down! And her bringing out the last wax figure, oh boy!
Overall this was another terrific chapter! Bravo to you for keeping the identity of the killer a secret for so long—almost two years! Can’t wait to see what will happen next! Till then keep up the fabulous work!
| nannygirl 11/19/12 . chapter 8
Okay so it’s almost thanksgiving and I’m reading a story that should be read during Halloween time. Is it a little weird? Yes. Do I care? Not really. This chapter was wonderfully written and just as chilling and suspenseful as the others!
Another terrific opening from the killer, those bits never fail to freak me out and make me want look over my shoulder lol.
I liked how you kind of started form the very beginning of the story sort of to recap all the things that happened. The gang going into the house and splitting up, the yell, the noose that Kelso hung from. All of it just as scary and creepy as the first time I read. I also really enjoyed that we got to see what Jackie and Hyde were doing at that time and them hearing the noises and smelling that yucky iron blood smells.
It was sweet how protective Hyde was of Jackie even before all this mess started. It’s just like him. And makes so much sense for him to become even more protective when he sees some of the horrifying scenes. Thought it was interesting though that Hyde is the one to see these scenes, out of everyone from the group. Is he a key to the mystery person? Will he be the one to save the gang? Hmm, you’ve really got me thinking.
A great rewrite of the big scene with him and Jackie trying to escape. Like dhow you kept things mostly the same but did add in a few differences that were noticed and appreciated. Awesome twist of having Hyde not be really dead, did NOT see that coming! But that makes it even more heartbreaking because Jackie is dead and Hyde saw her, him wanting to help her and rush her to the hospital was heartbreaking. It was at that moment I was a little glad that he didn’t know about the baby. There was a baby right? Right?
Terrific scene with Hyde and the killer. Their interaction was very very interesting. Very creepy and scary and again very suspenseful Through out the scene I was looking for hits to tell me who the killer was. A lot of the times the words sounded like something Laurie would say, but still I just can’t picture Laurie doing all that. Yes she’s evil and can even be called eth devil but killing her brother and his friends? I don’t think so…plus the part about her calling him Stevie and even Steven threw everything off. I could only imagine her calling him Hyde or Orphan Boy.
The ‘I’m Back’ line tells me we’ve met the person before. And it would fit with Laurie but that Stevie thing…Could it be Edna? No, no no because you said the person had Hazel eyes and that story you have or maybe now had plans of writing. stated that Edna had blue eyes like Hyde. Hmm.
Oo Hyde called/ thought the person was psychotic before. Hmm could it be Sam? Or Mitch? The only crazy person I can think of is Crazy Caroline. It’s her right? Or is that just too obvious? Gah! I don’t know!
Hyde killing himself was another good twist and pretty in character too I thought, with everyone else being dead I mean.
Now just like the beginning the last scene always gives me chills and this one was no different. Think this one was one of the best because it gave more clues to who the person was. The person called him Bud? Could it be Edna? She always said Hyde was like his father/Bud. But the kissing of the cheek. Well I guess that could be Edna too but I almost see that more of Laurie maybe even Crazy Caroline. Those colored eyes though are throwing me off. Edna had blue, Laurie had blue, what color were Caroline’s? Need to check that!
And now it’s down to Fez. Why he’s last had got to be a reason. Its’ gotta be someone he knows…like Caroline! Or Fenton! No Nina! I don’t know! But I can’t wait to find out!
Very wonderful work on the marvelously mysterious chapter Angie, it was so very well written and planned out. I really enjoyed reading it! Will be reading the next chapter soon, and I’m hoping the killer’s identity will be revealed but if not no worries the guess while it can be frustrating not to know, is kinda fun! lol
Terrific job once more. Enjoyed it very much. Back for the latest chapter soon. Till then, keep up the fantastic work!
| HydeLuver 11/7/12 . chapter 9
Was not expecting that at all. I kept trying to guess who it might be and at first I thought it was Laurie and then Mitch for some reason. The whole story is pretty amazing but this chapter is definitely my favorite. I can't wait to see how else you surprise us. Update soon!
| Marla's Lost 11/3/12 . chapter 9
You totally surprise me! Didn't expect this ending and it was great! Looking forward to the next one because I don't think she's entirely done with Fez yet...or him done with her!
| MistyMountainHop 11/3/12 . chapter 9
Ooh, I never would have guessed that person as the killer, but I like it. Of course, your author's note
at the end makes me suspicious. You are a wily author, Angie! I wouldn't put anything past you.
The killer's motivations make sense, considering who it is. You captured her voice well.
Fez's fear throughout this chapter is palpable. I felt for him when he found Kelso's body. I have no idea how Fez is going to save himself - or even if he's going to save himself. I anticipate your next post!
Comments on specific lines below.
Fez. My Fez. Everything was done for him. He has to understand that. I did this for him, for us, so no one could tear us apart. I needed the pawns out of the game so I could make my mark - CRAZY CAROLINE? IS SHE THE KILLER? *calms down.
"Oh my Jorba Linda… guys there's a dead body!" He screamed as his body wracked with fear-induced
trembles. "Oh what do I do, what do I do…? Kelso?! Eric? Hyde?! Where are you?!" - Aww, I could hear Fez's voice here.
"Sorry to say it, sweetie, but he was almost too easy." - And I definitely hear Caroline's voice in this line.
| ShanghaiLily 11/2/12 . chapter 9
You are so great for surprising us! What a great choice for a horror villain. Awesome! Can't wait to see what happens next. Also, loving the House of Wax references :)
| SmokinAK47 11/2/12 . chapter 9
Cool chapter very in character for Caroline!
| MistyMountainHop 10/5/12 . chapter 8
Angie, this is a terrific chapter. My heart was pumping with all the tension. I really enjoyed it, as awful as the events were. Great description and conflict. I'll be coughing up imaginary blood for days. *lol*
Comments on specific lines below:
Paranoia and lack of trust in society made him one of the most respectable people I knew. - This line right here makes me even more curious as to who the killer is. Is you? *lol*
His fault was simply this; underneath the stone surface, a heart was beating. - This is so well-put, Angie! Love it.
he promised himself he'd always protect her. - Except for last chapter when the KILLER GOT HER. *lol* Oh, I shouldn't be laughing.
As someone who has never won in his life, giving up wasn't so difficult for him. - Until he lived with the Formans and Jackie became his chick. But, yeah. Maybe he hadn't come long enough on his journey yet to feel like he really had something to hold onto.
These next two paragraphs are effectively creepy, and I felt what Hyde experienced in them. Very nice (but nasty) writing, Angie:
As Hyde opened the door, he began to cough harshly. The scent of blood was potent to his nose and he felt as if he were going to be sick. A quiet drip was heard every two seconds; it seemed as if it were timed. The young man took the lighter from his pocket and flicked it; he automatically wished he hadn't.
"Jesus Christ." He whispered, his stomach twisted with nausea that he was finding hard to keep down. He stared into vacant blue eyes that stared into his and he couldn't breathe. Blood stained the pale skin of the body in front of him as it slowly turned in a circle because of the noose around the broken neck. Hyde pressed his hand to his own neck and quickly drew his hand back in horror; he knew it wasn't broken… but why did it feel that way?
he would be the one to face himself, and that's something I knew he wouldn't be able to do. - Excellent line. :D And so sinisterrr. Love how the killer digs inside each one of its victims - er, not the literal way. The figurative way. *lol*
Hyde's hand shook as he flicked open his Zippo lighter. He held the flame over his pocket knife and closed his eyes as he felt the entire blade heat up beneath his fingers. He had to do this for her… otherwise it could get infected. He hoped she would understand. - Aww, he's still trying to protect her. He loves her so much, and you show us this rather than tell us. Well done.
Hyde ripped off the mask and felt his entire body run cold. His eyes widened as he stared into the hazel eyes he had never taken so much as a thought to even think about. - Ooh, a clue! WHOSE EYES ARE THOSE? *flails* Eric's got greenish eyes... *ponders*
"Oh, bummer, I thought you were down for the count." - Laurie would talk that way. *twitches* But that doesn't mean the killer is her.
"We were done with you a long time ago." - Another clue! Again, it could be Laurie. Or Mitch. Or Timmy! *lol*
"Y-you saw the noose," I gasped as he raised the knife above his head. I was vulnerable. I had known this part wouldn't be easy. He still kept the blade above him yet his attention was on me now. "You're wondering how that could be…who that could be…" - Nice that the killer has a frightening moment. It can't last though, can it? And hooray for Hyde! It may be a fleeting victory, but it's more than his friends got.
I knew I shouldn't have…" He couldn't finish his sentence.
"Trusted me? Oh, Stevie, you trusted me?" - *ahem* "Stevie"? Is it Edna? Chrissy? Bud? ACK! *lol* Angie? No one ever called him "Stevie" on the show, so I have no idea.
"I'm sorry, Bud. You'll get your justice soon… it's what you would want." I whispered, kissing the cold cheek. - Okay, so this makes me think the killer is Edna. Whoever it is, how is s/he going to use Hyde in the end against Fez? Why is Fez last? Still so curious!
Question/Query: I re-read the last chapter. It illustrated the same events but from Jackie's POV, right? She thought she saw Hyde die, but he clearly didn't die. Is there any significance to the fact she and Hyde both called the killer a "sick fuck" in their chapters? Or is it that Jackie had hung around Hyde long enough to take on more of his idiolect?
Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading the next chapters!
| Marla's Lost 10/4/12 . chapter 8
I'm still thinking it's a macrabre version of Laurie doing the killing but she has to be on steriods or something to be hanging people by a noose and disemboweling so quickly.
Your are the mistress of horror this morning - thank you for the scare.