My goodness, in just a few short paragraphs you had me in tears!

Your descriptive writing really made me feel how he was aching for something he knew he would never have-he wanted to feel real love, love between a man and a woman, but he loved her far too much to just take her.

Absolutely wonderful!

Really nice job. I like how you show love, but rather than lapse into corny old mush and sap, you keep it dark and creepy by referring to his self-torture and his drugging her.

Which is so cool also because it makes you wonder to what extent this all is like a self-fulfilling prophesy; he can't have her because he believes he can't, he can't be normal because he believes he can't.

It is also more moving and powerful than the usual fluff. Nice work.