It's really good. I think you should definitely keep on updating. Keep the chapters coming.

Good start but it was too short and your language was choppy. Nice idea though so improve and keep going ;)

Good writing...is it from the point of view of Kiara?

This is a really good start, but unless you want to make about 50 chapters, I think you need to write as much as you can. Another thing that is okay, but personaly bothered me a little is the names of the Twins. In tge Lion King, they all have names in Kiswahilli...but if you like the names, or they have meaning for the future, keep them. It's your stiry, not anyone else's.

P.S. In response your reviews of my stories:

No, I am a girl. xD I do not want to reslease my age fir privacy reasons. You really shouldnt say your age on websites that you dont know anyone. And I give no spoilers! :D But I will be working on my TLK3 story today, so yay. um...oh, and ty for the r&rs! :D